All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Parents participation in school activities such as bargain sales and soccer clubs after school has certain advantages and disadvantages. While there are positive sides of parents participation, however, I think negative sides outweighs positive sides. Some people might assert every parent should get themselves involved with school activities since it is an excellent way of strengthening the parent-child relationships. However, there are many other ways to improve the bond between children-parents relationships, and also excessive participation may have an adverse effect as well.
First of all, admittedly, up to a certain degree of parents participation may have the benefit with their children spending time together. However, while the argument is plausible at first glance, there are many other ways to build rapport with their children. The activity that parents participate does not always match with their children's activity. Take a hypothetical situation; for example, a mother could work as a voluntary soccer coach after school, yet her son may play basketball. Also, there are a lot of other ways to spend time with your children. Like go on a short trip, or having a quality discussion during dinner time. Besides, excessive participation may cause a side effect, for instance, parents who engage too much may be committed too much, do not have time for their children at all.
Secondly, engaging school activity may be impossible for some parent. Not many families are wealthy enough to stay home after work and do the voluntary job. Some have to work two jobs or work during night time. This difference between families has to be considered when school is trying to make a policy about parent engagement. If that mandatory participation policy works, students that who's parents can not participate may feel alienated and denied. Therefore it would be hard to tell this "all involved volunteer" strategy is advantageous.
In conclusion, I realize the school's all participatory strategy has an adverse effect instead and a positive one. There are two reasons why. First, there are many other ways to spend time as a family and could cause an embarrassing setback. Second, in practical aspects, not every parent can participate in school activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36768802228 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01800012155 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548746518106 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2304827196 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7619047619 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0952380952 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181088305753 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605478295706 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378585371092 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110446978933 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490756247216 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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