Internet and computers an innovation of the 20th century is often considered equivalent to electricity an innovation of 19th century. Both the things had an a huge impact over the lifestyle of people and had dared to change and hence both were faced with opposition and reluctance. History is said to repeat itself and by seeing the adaption of electricity with today's life style it is quite clear that soon internet will be incorporated in a similar fashion. It was because of electricity that air-conditioner, oven, light etc came into existence and internet has been going on a similar path. One of the major change that had came because of the internet, videos and computer is the online way of learning things. Although many consider that it won't be able to replace the conventional way of learning as a lot of distraction are present with it, I believe that the online learning with time will be embraced and people will learn to avoid the irrelevant and time consuming items.
Salman Khan, an MIT graduate student was asked to make her niece study high school level mathematics. The only problem that seemed to arise was Mr. Khan and her niece used to stay in two different cities. Mr. Khan used to travel from his city to her niece's city on weekend and that is how the task went. However there were scenarios when Mr. Khan couldn't travel and hence he used to make videos of the things which he was going to make her study and send it to her. This became an idea of a very big website today popularly known as the khanacademy.com . The most basic benefit of online learning over conventional learning is it kills the problem of distances. There have been many third world countries who do not have infrastructure or relevant faculty to make them study. The developing nation here are benefited by the developed nation hence making the world a global village.
Videos does consist of advertisement which sometimes diverts the mind of the learner. Advertisement is said to be an art. An art of convincing people, to spend money which they do not have for something that do not need. However, if advertisement wouldn't be there the cost of videos would be high enough making it difficult for the larger part of the world to access. Also, there are softwares which do block advertisements thus saving our time. Other distraction are social-networking websites, where people knowingly or unknowingly get hooked. But, this is something that the user should understand is a total unnecessity . When we are getting to learn from the world's most renowned instructors and getting to learn the cutting edge technologies it becomes our responsibility to avoid the vicious circle of social network and concentrate on what is important.
Although, getting educated on internet has various benefit such as exposure to pace of learning, practicality, novelty, different point of view learning however many emotions are driven by staying physically present only. In a classroom type learning each and student does get attention of the teacher although not always, however this is totally missing in the e-learning. Also, interaction with colleagues and having a healthy competition with them enhances the mind and the speed of learning. Finally, as most of the schools and university have many type electronic gadget such as phone prohibited at their place the level of distraction is zero. But, many a times we have seen that a child might be physically present but mentally absent. During the lecture he or she might go to sleep, or talk and do mischiefs with his or her batchmates. Hence the level of distraction over here is par with that of the online learning.
With the advance in technology, ideas change, perception change, way of doing things also change. There are enormous websites such as KhanAcademy, Udemy, Udacity, NPTEL etc where we could learn and by adding the software which blocks the advertisements the level of distraction also could be decreased. The taste of learning things vary from person to person and there is no one solution to the problem. However according to me we should embrace the upcoming model of learning, differentiate the relevant things from the irrelevant things on the internet and detest going to the time wasting products.
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- Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.Write a response in which you discuss the 50
- True success can be measured primarily in terms of the goals one sets for oneself.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you ta 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, so, third, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3551.0 2235.4752809 159% => OK
No of words: 718.0 442.535393258 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94568245125 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.17643912491 4.55969084622 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7980975542 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 340.0 215.323595506 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473537604457 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 1116.9 704.065955056 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3189825016 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.606060606 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7575757576 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.93939393939 5.21951772744 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 5.13820224719 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134232613534 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327581591037 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282986388518 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0746892854404 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227857070366 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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