The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Cooperation means understanding others prospective and taking every feedback positively.Leader can start company by competitive nature but only with cooperation it will lead to succeed.
Competition is inbuilt quality for every individual. Every person compete with other in terms of work, high rank or etc. So its not the thing that can be instilled. Although, importance of competitive nature is irrefutable. But when it becomes extreme, can cause only destruction. Let us take example of Adolf Hitler. Because of his extreme competitive nature he made people suffer. So, competitiveness can get you short-living happiness but at the end it can cause only destruction.
On the other hand, cooperation is difficult to built and it can lead one to success. Leader must have both cooperative and competitive quality for achieving goal. Lets consider example of Bill Gates. He started Microsoft because of the competition but his cooperation with employees made him successful.
At the conclusion, I support the claim made in the argument that the best way for society to prepare its young people for leadership is by instilling in them sense of cooperation.We also need competition in limited manner.
- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 33
- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 33
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 33
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 58.6224719101 39% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1018.0 2235.4752809 46% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 189.0 442.535393258 43% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38624338624 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 4.55969084622 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23505926771 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 215.323595506 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62962962963 0.4932671777 128% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 704.065955056 46% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => Sentence length is too short
Sentence length SD: 53.029304567 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.7142857143 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5 23.4991977007 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.07142857143 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201879662357 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621019494134 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12837185096 0.0758088955206 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162449858164 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.2023763301 0.0667264976115 303% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 48.8420337079 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.39 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 100.480337079 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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