The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The human race is ahead of any other race on this planet only due to traits of having competition and cooperation. Cooperation i.e. working together has survived human in all the conditions from simple row to giant catastrophe. Sense of competion has always inspired human to do something better than others. Speaker here asserts that to prepare young people for leadership in any field is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Agreed that cooperation is cardinal in leadership but competition is also crucial. So I agree partially with the speaker.
First of all, leadership means you lead some project and your subordinates follows you to complete one common goal. The field of leadership can be any. For instance, in industry of electronics, the team has goal to design one chip for latest computer and team leader gives direction and fellow engineers design accordingly. Now the sense of cometition doesn't work here. All the team member has to work in a sync and team leader also has to cooperate with them, so that product arrives in the market at right time. Proverbially said, if you want to go fast, go alone and if you want to go far, go together. This line explains all.
Further, all the movements for freadom or agains rascism are succeeded because of cooperation of the people. Freadom movement in India or in South Africa are the great example of the same. The Mahatma Gandhi or Nelson Mandella alone could not able to free the country from the so called the Britishraj. Mahatma Gandhi walk along with all the people, and successfully acomplished a talk with non-violance which seemed impossible initially. Any leader is responsible to accomplish the goals he or she has targeted, without sense of cooperation, it is very difficult.
However, Sense of competition inspires us to accomplish something great. And according to me sense of competition is not needed to be instilled in human kind. We have that trait from the birth. We compete in petty games we played when child, we compete for good grades, and then for good job. Our world is designed in such a way that compition is inevitable.
Sometimes, working alone in an austere conditions, scientists discovers or invents something, but to make a great leader for the future, trait of cooperation is must and sense of cooperation must be instilled in the young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...only due to traits of having competition and cooperation. Cooperation i.e. workin...
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Line 5, column 319, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Gandhi) must be used with a third-person verb: 'walks'.
Suggestion: walks
...o called the Britishraj. Mahatma Gandhi walk along with all the people, and successf...
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Line 9, column 40, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'condition'?
Suggestion: condition
... Sometimes, working alone in an austere conditions, scientists discovers or invents someth...
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'as to', 'for instance', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260579064588 0.238963963785 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.153674832962 0.154291517835 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0690423162584 0.0886310499679 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0601336302895 0.0506014161523 119% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0400890868597 0.0449626384858 89% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129175946548 0.123526278965 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0289532293987 0.0379742944744 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82348892787 2.82910677849 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0356347438753 0.0316879551592 112% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0014075125626 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0824053452116 0.0950106342287 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00890868596882 0.0245489744465 36% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00445434298441 0.0157978311181 28% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2379.0 2899.98275862 82% => OK
No of words: 401.0 478.390804598 84% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93266832918 6.0591788892 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.65681771538 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.331670822943 0.369966551584 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.254364089776 0.285172536893 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184538653367 0.207245337619 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142144638404 0.136322040163 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82348892787 2.82910677849 100% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 234.298850575 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546134663342 0.492565540709 111% => OK
Word variations: 62.3442129718 56.8184620615 110% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 21.1264367816 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.04 23.7468607788 68% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2583712945 62.0618507366 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.16 143.81877709 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.04 23.7468607788 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48 0.728815259664 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.87931034483 102% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.71264367816 39% => OK
Readability: 41.4764089776 52.2641144681 79% => OK
Elegance: 1.64912280702 1.64547068916 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.475145362179 0.39480681544 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0946835619417 0.11556216369 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0873845632558 0.0736162880345 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.447554078352 0.531340600358 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.178469403125 0.15197228837 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147572100181 0.158818324754 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111775356612 0.0851127212816 131% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.271849178725 0.388921930462 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.045542691159 0.0677916285025 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306522249694 0.28015025965 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768530746675 0.0610219844235 126% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.8591954023 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30459770115 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.96264367816 222% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.10632183908 99% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.93390804598 76% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 3.04597701149 197% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 15.0862068966 113% => OK
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 3.5 Out of 6