The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The topic statement contends that the society should instill a sense of cooperation and not competition in its young people so as to prepare them for leadership in government, industry, or other fields.I concede that cooperation is vital for leadership in any field, however one cannot undermine the role of competition. Competition not only brings about the best from any individual but also boosts their enthusiam towards their work.
Youth is the age when maximum values can be inculcated, which will be lucrative later on. But outweighing cooperation in place of competition is untenuous. On one hand both cooperation and competition are two essential wheels of a bicycle; however, if compelled to give importance to one of them, i would go for competition. An outstanding leader who has a sense of competition can only lead to his/her organisation's progress and growth. As the world today is driven by skills that must be at par with the ever-changing advancements, competition can garauntee that individuals keep pace with the moving advancements.
A healthy competition can also prove beneficial to its customers, so that they get the best products and services. And a healthy competition in case of polical parties will lead to the political leaders actually fulfilling their promises, specially in a country like India where politicians are famous for making dubious promises and not fulfilling them after elections.
I acknowledge that some might say that competition would engender harsh feelings in the team-mates and that rather complementing and ameliorating each others work, they might depriciate it. However, if competition is healthy then it can improve and expedite the work. Yes, Competition can also lead to faster completion of work.
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... work. Yes, Competition can also lead to faster completion of work.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.237012987013 0.240241500013 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.13961038961 0.157235817809 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0714285714286 0.0880659088768 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0584415584416 0.0497285424764 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0422077922078 0.0444667217837 95% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12987012987 0.12292977631 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0324675324675 0.0406280797675 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.20027664621 2.79330140395 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0227272727273 0.030933414821 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0876623376623 0.0997080785238 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0487012987013 0.0249443105267 195% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0162337662338 0.0148568991511 109% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1793.0 2732.02544248 66% => OK
No of words: 278.0 452.878318584 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.44964028777 6.0361032391 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.58838876751 89% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36690647482 0.366273622748 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.305755395683 0.280924506359 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241007194245 0.200843997647 120% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.197841726619 0.132149295362 150% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20027664621 2.79330140395 115% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 219.290929204 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597122302158 0.48968727796 122% => OK
Word variations: 64.1925483119 55.4138127331 116% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6194690265 58% => OK
Sentence length: 23.1666666667 23.380412469 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.2281522503 59.4972553346 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.416666667 141.124799967 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 23.380412469 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.833333333333 0.674092028746 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.21349557522 153% => OK
Readability: 53.742206235 51.4728631049 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.66216216216 1.64882698954 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386395506812 0.391690518653 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0888133375761 0.123202303941 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0441257782009 0.077325440228 57% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.546898472403 0.547984918172 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.159385579103 0.149214159877 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14629571776 0.161403998019 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118121995311 0.0892212321368 132% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.29427348896 0.385218514788 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0323847249801 0.0692045440612 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25914732128 0.275328986314 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127059629409 0.0653680567796 194% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 13.5995575221 66% => OK
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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