The statement claims that the society would be more prepared for work-related market if young people be instilled with cooperation sense instead of competition. Although these two core subjects seem to be opposite abilities, they are very close to a threshold that, in my opinion, would be the ideal for a worker in any field.
Hence the cooperation can advance to associations and collaborations considering that people working coactively lead to supportive benefits in common. For example, a leader post in a big industry can make use of its cooperative sense and intending to produce a new commodity, but in the case his industry doesn’t have all equipment to build this new product, so it could propose a partnership with another company and share the profits. Similarly it can happen in a government issue, in fact, a good illustration is the Maastricht Treaty which created the Euro Zone in 1998 aiming to secure the economy growth and integrate the union with border countries.
On the other hand, the competitive spirit is also a crucial pillar for the market expiation and economy overall. Its importance begins with the self-improvement and how this skill can push to get personal goals. Considering that these young generations ought to not have competitive understanding, how would the school exams and colleges evaluate students for their future career? Assuming there will be elections, how would a nation choose the leader of the country? Also, it is important for the technology development the rivalry among companies, releasing new products with a faster processing time or more storage on a device for example. Moreover, this is how Steve Jobs created his brand, from a dream project with friend in a small garage to one of the biggest companies in the world.
Therefore these two abilities together turns into and ideal qualification. In fact, it is very clear to see this advantage in a simple football game. The attacks need the cooperation of the entire team to occur. They have the planned moves in which there are leaders and also players that ill secure and protect for the goal success.
Without doubt the combination of these competences can only bring benefits when applied to the personal improvement. The competition sense cannot be seen as a bad capacity but as expertise intelligence and the cooperative sense is important to demonstrate that no matter how excellent personal skills one person has, the value of a good team work is immeasurable when facing challenges. In other words, picking just one of these abilities to teach young generations how to behave in their future career could be disastrous.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...the ideal for a worker in any field. Hence the cooperation can advance to associat...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... another company and share the profits. Similarly it can happen in a government issue, in...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... the biggest companies in the world. Therefore these two abilities together turns into...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, similarly, so, still, therefore, for example, in fact, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11034482759 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91643422436 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55632183908 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0805927807 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.5 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148497333196 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422533999602 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459568761166 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808520679697 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357936600071 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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