The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to whi

This topic raises the controversial issue of whether the competition or a cooperation is a major fact for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields. Indisputably, the feeling of competition could help people to gain success in some cases. Nevertheless, cooperation is the major factor that must be installed among the young individuals to maintain peace and success in many of the field. Thus, i would like to argue that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other field is by installing in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition.
First of all, all of us know that cooperation is a key to get success and happy in every people's life. To illustrate this , let us look at an example, in a school, the cooperation among the teacher's and the faculty members is a key to make it reputed in that area; all the students prefer to read in a school where there is a peace and cooperative feeling among all the teachers and students. If there is a feeling of competition among the teachers that who will be the best through the eye of students or principal, then all the teachers try to prove themselves good by using any efforts whether that may be good for the students or not. If it happens so, then, slowly the quality of education will diminish and the school will not be reputed and popular as it was before. hence, cooperation is a major fact to gain success .
Moreover, in the hospital also, cooperation is indeed the main factor that has to be among all the members , doctors and staff. If the environment is peaceful and happy, then, it is likely that the patient will get soon recovery; peace is the main factor that make the people feel relaxed and calm. The feeling of competition among doctors or other staff in this case might even lead death to the people's life in some cases.
Furthermore, in some cases like in business, the competition may lead success to their business but it will have to be a healthy competition. On a contrary, if the businessman do something unhealthy to the public in order to uplift their business then that may ruin their overall prestige and business too. For example, in order to uplift in the compititive word if the business man mix some chemical in the food so that the food would not go rotten soon and if they are caught doing so, then their business would be suspended. it will harm them a lot.
To sum up, rather than a competition the sense of cooperation is always useful in every field.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, thus, as to, for example, in fact, first of all, in some cases, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60831509847 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68875695976 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424507658643 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3226492374 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.882352941 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8823529412 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 5.21951772744 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200250442609 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747519251748 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137027019222 0.0758088955206 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119402490889 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.155959597942 0.0667264976115 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.8420337079 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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