The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Throughout the history, we, as human beings, have not been succesful of stemming our instinct features while constructing a society together. Therefore, the notion of competition is manifested through society, especially the ones who try to accomplish some successes in their lives. On the other hand, cooperation is showed itself as something that is constructed for the well-being of the society. Therefore, i believe that coorperation is a better understanding of forming a leadership notion in young people minds rather than the competition that builds up a society that becomes a set of self-oriented beings who endlessly try to reach their limits to be succesfull.
Currently the world that we are living is dominated with the notion of competition since we have it naturally. In the nature, survival of the fittest can be a rudimentary side of the competition. Moreover, capitalism drives us to be homo economicus individuals who act as a firm and manage themselves through compete with each other. Even though, this helps individuals and society as whole by driving people to do something better after each task, it is also considered as one of the reason of corruption in the societies. The dictators who have influenced the society throughout the history can be a perfect example for this situation.
On the other hand, cooperation is something that we formed as a society to live better and placidly. Cooperation can be considered as something that enchances us, feed us and presents us wide array of thoughts. Therefore, instilling the concept of cooperation to young people for leadership in different fields can be very efficient way to develop society and well-being for all. For example: Unlike Hitler, Ataturk who is the leader and the founder of Turkish Republic chose the cooperation side to promulgate his ideas to the society. His revolution is still dominated in Turkey unlike Hitler's short lasting existence.
To conclude, even though I believe that competition is a significant aspect of functioning society better, cooperation is a notion that restrict the pendulum of extreme sides and make a more placid environment to develop more rich ideas together.
- The argument to be analyzed is as follows:The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company.“According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people atten 24
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 50
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 83
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o be homo economicus individuals who act as a firm and manage themselves through ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 351.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23646723647 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05814412961 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51566951567 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4031210074 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.533333333 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124869594841 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456304928052 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565276582524 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741376909756 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431846640786 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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