In today's modern living, arguments about whether the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition have or not taken place. While some people contend the former, others believe otherwise. In my opinion, although both options might have meritorious points, without a doubt, I would settle upon the former one because for me, it has more practical worth than otherwise. Certainly, I stand on this perception because of following reasons.
One of the reasons is that in modern society, cooperation is more highly regarded virtue than competition. Nowadays, various stakeholders are gaining profit from collaboration between countries, companies and fields rather than competing with each other. For example, free trade between countries make each other improve economy by easing selling more products. In this regard, it is manifest that we have to nurture young people as a leader who has brilliant ability in cooperation. On the other hand, there are some people who contend that competitions is more effective to increase benefit since people are more goal-oriented when they are exposed to competitive situations. In all probability, it seems to be an alluring answer at first, however, after further researches it gives the notions that it may create less productive results. If young people who are future leaders in various fields are immersed in competition too much, it will be difficult for them to follow the current trend in the global society, which is peaceful and emphasizes cooperation.
An additional contention that cause me to favor this side is that competition is what we have to avoid emphasizing for young people's happiness. There are a lot of evidence showing people are less happy in more competitive society. For example, Korea is the representative country where competition is underscored throughout the society, and the country takes the lowest ranking of how people are happy in a country despite their high GDP. Even though there are some opinions that suggest instilling in young people a sense of competition can increase profit of many fields, it does not ensure that people in that society can be satisfied with their life.
In summary, I strongly hold the opinion that by emphasizing cooperation, our society have to educate young people for leadership in future society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: WORTH_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worse', the comparative of 'bad'?
Suggestion: worse
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, still, while, for example, in summary, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 391.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24040920716 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84950889521 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547314578005 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0425971408 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0625 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4375 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255667287779 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843307908558 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096756358494 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172371675664 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563626969386 0.0667264976115 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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