The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
I would be hesitant to say that instilling a sense of cooperation, not competition is the "only best" way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in many fields. According to me, not only cooperation but also competitive mind is necessary to become a good leader. So, instilling a sense of cooperation and not competition is not the best way to prepare good leaders. Both things look equally important to become a leader.
Firstly, we talk about the necessity of cooperation in becoming a good leader. A leader is the one, who is among us, who represents us, who wishes goodwill of his people. These are the things we expect from the leader. So, to do all these things, a leader is expected to be present within his people, understanding their problems, cooperating with them to make them achieve something they wish, put self-efforts in their problems. This way a leader can win the hearts of people through cooperation. And that is why the cooperating is quite important to become a good leader. For example, in a game of cricket, let's say a youngster has to bowl the important over of the match and expected not to give away runs easily. Obviously, he will be under pressure as whole country's hopes are lying on his shoulder. At that time, the captain(leader of the team) who has a lot of experience to handle such situations will ask him to stay calm, know his inputs and then suggest him the way he should bowl. If the captain talks to a youngster, it will surely unnerve his situation of pressure. So, cooperation is important to become a good leader.
Now, we will talk about the necessity of competition in becoming a good leader. As mentioned in the previous paragraph that a good leader wishes the goodwill of his people, he should win. To win in a situation, a leader is expected to have a competitive attitude. If he lacks such attitude, he will most likely expect a defeat without any efforts. This does not make a good leader. A leader should have hunger to win and for this, competitive nature is also quite important. For instance, taking cricket example again, an Australian cricket is playing against Indian Cricket team and before the match begins, everyone believes that Australian team is strong and so will defeat india easily. So, a good leader should keep faith in team and acquire a competitive stragty in order to win a game. it is unsure he will win or lose, but at least it will be noted that he tried.
So, it is not the best way to have cooperation only and not the competitive nature to become an ideal leader. Both things should go along side by side.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... an ideal leader. Both things should go along side by side.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, so, still, then, as to, at least, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62931034483 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71954750184 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448275862069 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.848092027 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6153846154 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8461538462 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69230769231 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176942129974 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547506757727 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108764945554 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152915381946 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.152209350776 0.0667264976115 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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