The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
A true leader is a person who guides the group to become more efficient, inspires his people and most importantly is respected by all. These qualities can hardly be achieved in a competitive society. Thus I agree with the statement that a sense of cooperation, instead of competition can help the society to prepare its youth for future leadership.
The first reason, a sense of cooperation works better than of competition is because it allows diversity to flourish. When a group of people is working on a single agenda to become the best among all, they often conform to one particular type instead of nurturing their own uniqueness. In competition, there are certain rules and requirements. To meet those, the candidates will be fixated on those rules only. Whereas when these people will be inflicted by sense of cooperation, they will grow as a complement to one another. They will help each other to draw out their own best feature. In this way, we will know who can actually lead his followers to become a better candidate which is the ultimate quality of a leader.
When a class is tested individually to do well in an exam, every student will focus only on their own betterment. Same exam, if conducted in group-wise way, overall performance will improve, because each group will have one or more natural dominants who will push all his/her mates to perform better. This not only reinforces the fact that leadership is developed in times of cooperation, but also points out that leaders must motivate their followers. Such quality can be instilled in young adults when they will be taught to help each other from an early age. Unfortunately the nature of competition lacks that very feature. A true leader is deferentiated by most because of his benevolent characteristics. When people face constant competition, they become self-centric and view everyone else as another obstacle in his way to success. Such mentality leads to hatred among them. As a result leaders born out of competition are often not great leader, rather a churlish higher authority with the power to rule his subordinate.
However, a sense of competition is also required to some extent. Without constant competition to with one's own self, self-improvement is impossible. Also moderate competition under supervision also creates an environment of learning.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, still, thus, well, whereas, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0645994832 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95730309935 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547803617571 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7522284837 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0909090909 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5909090909 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193903318831 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538031469033 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641454404377 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125967920496 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606181984181 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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