The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Is cooperation or competition the best way to prepare our young people for leadership? Some might argue competition is more important than cooperation because we can find the person who is the best and most suitable for the job. In my opinion, cooperation is more important than competition because everything that we have today is a product of people putting their minds and efforts together.
Barack Obama, the two-time winner of the presidential elections of 2008 and 2012 can only be possible with the effort of hundreds of people working together for a greater cause. Winning a presidential election cannot happen with just one person. It is a team effort. Everyone cooperates for something they all believe in and to support their leader. Barack Obama is a great leader who knows the significance of cooperation. During his time served as the president he cooperated with his ministries and the states to make things happen. With cooperation, many things are possible than when we exercise competition. So, it is important for us to develop cooperation in minds of the young people.
Other than that, many worldwide well-known companies are the best in their industry because their leadership is based on cooperation than competition. In Google, people who have troubles with their coding get help from their manager or even their peers. If competition is presence, people would rather not help each other and we would not have Google as helpful as we have today. Similarly, Facebook would not be available for us if Mark Zuckberg and his friends were competing with each other. Instead, they put their minds together to create Facebook. One more example would be Amazon. Hundreds of orders gets processed and delivered to various parts of the United States. Cooperation is what makes this possible and doable. Cooperation helps the world make great things.
Lastly, say in the architectural or engineering industry, cooperation is very important. The symbol of love or “Taj Mahal” was built with a cooperation of millions of people. If they would have competed with each other, this might not be possible. This is true for any wonders of the world including Great Wall of China and the pyramids of Egypt.
In conclusion, competition is more important than cooperation for young people in leadership. People should be willing to help each other.
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
- Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 194, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had competed'?
Suggestion: had competed
...peration of millions of people. If they would have competed with each other, this might not be poss...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, lastly, similarly, so, well, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1188630491 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80303045806 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50645994832 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2328586335 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.1923076923 118.986275619 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8846153846 23.4991977007 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.34615384615 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199593522081 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620258955269 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835533236005 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13715806829 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571659127229 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.