The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Understanding that leadership entails being able to distinctively work as a team together, irrespective of the situation, distinguishes you in a place. To be a good leader, one must be a good follower and vice versa, hence making it possible to have both mindsets. For instance , in Nigerian there is a saying that, when a group of people urinate together, it produces more foam than when an individual, just urinates. This implies that when you work as a team and not on individual basis you do more.
I agree that working as a team creates more opportunities than seeing your neighbor as a competitor. When you look at 'Team' as an acronym, one may interpret as; "Together Everyone Achieves More". Having this at the back of our minds, it is empirical for the government to instill the coöperation into the youths than competition; because over time we have come to realize that competition has done us more harm than good especially in Africa and Nigeria at large. Competition brings about greed, corruption, thereby making our youths vernal.
As much as the government is working hard to create sustainable means of improving its citizens life, it is also important for it to instill working together in organisations as one of the means to do this. It is also important to aver that team work helps in building strong legacy. This reduces productivity, thereby making every one in a team to see productivity as a responsibility and not a means to outshine one another.
Organizing team works in organisations, it will help instill togetherness into our youths, thereby making everyone see coöperation as a necessity if they are looking to move forward or succeed in their various endeavors. Siting an example from the just concluded Shell innovative competition in my country, it is rather a coöperation than a competition as people from different areas of the country were brought together to meet a particular goal, this brought about a means of accessing cleaner and better energy. Thus an avenue ti increase revenue and generate more profit in the country, thereby improving our energy sector and infrastructure.
From improved infrastructure, to improved knowledge an a country free from vernal people, the need to instill coöperation( the team spirit cannot be over emphasized . I will rather aver vehemently that instilling the team spirit among the youths of my country looking at past and present event as stated above , will help reduce their vulnerability to competition thereby building a better society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, may, so, still, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14423076923 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0937858292 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516826923077 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5427494172 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.75 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5625 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0798600798303 0.243740707755 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284988561229 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0251337989457 0.0758088955206 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0474066729268 0.150359130593 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220666359504 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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