The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition

Young people are said to be the future of a nation. Their actions reflect the growth of one's country. The prompt suggests that they should lead towards coorporation and not competition. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the statement that coorporation is the best.

However, Competition is needed for a human being to have motivation and have a sense to do work better than others. For example, In a school, when students take exams, the teacher compares scores of all students and congradulate the toppers. 1st rank holder (Student A) is appreciated by the principle and collects awards whereas the 2nd rank student (Student B) who lost the higher rank due to one mark will be full of regrets. Student B will henceforth put loads of effort to redeem his subtle mark differences and gain more marks for the next exam. Thus "competition" plays a role of "encouragement" to make oneself a better person, which can be a best way to prepare youngsters. However, competition can help growth not only in fields of education but also sports, government, enterpernership and many more.

Even though, competition is a good approch, Coorporation is proved to be more effective than competition. Lets take a IT company, there are loads of employees working day and night. These companies have a lot of teams to carryout specific tasks. All team members hold team meetings, share their opinions and proceed to their goal. If the team members are put in a position to compete within the team due to greed for power, the team would ultimetly collapse due to lack of team work and coorporation. "Team work makes the dream work" may suite the situation sharply. However, this situation can be seen in many fields, for example Education, sports and many more, where competition would ruin a single person or a teams success. In case of sports, Let's take a volley ball game. There might be some people who want fame and would not pass the ball to other players. This is a dangerous situation especially in games like basketball, football etc where team work is necessary. Thus, Coorporation can lead to a new level of success rather than competition.

Discipline is very much needed for a youth to attract the society rather than competition. For example, let's take actors and actresses. If they were to compete with others rather than taking care of their own work with coorporation, they would fail to catch public attention and miss their oppertunity to show their potential to the world. Its time to stop think about otehrs life and start to think about our life. Leadership of a person comes from the way he represents his actions which mainly involves discepline.

Thus I conclude by saying that Coorporation is very much needed for the youth to start off. And after some experience in their fields, then it is better to have a competition and lead the way towards a future with success.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, thus, whereas, for example, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2421.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9008097166 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94705210853 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516194331984 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0543908761 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4642857143 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6428571429 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10714285714 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201971122861 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497858797005 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046186972071 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107062618807 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406355136816 0.0667264976115 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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