The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry and other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
I disagree with the claim that society should prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields by instilling them in a sense of cooperation, not competition. I do not think that they should have a sense of solely cooperation or solely competition. They should have equal senses of these, some individuals more than others, but they should have equal exposure.
First, I will outline why society should instill to its young people a sense of cooperation to prepare them for leadership. All individuals in leadership roles, whether it be the principal of a school, the chief executive officer of a corporation, or the President of the United States create their own policies, procedures, and guidelines that should be followed by the people that they lead. How can they create these policies, procedures, and guidelines if they never had to cooperate with someone else's guidelines? How will they know what they want to change or what they want to adhere to if they never had examples to help them while being under someone else's leadership? If people that wish to lead one day have a sense of cooperation when they are younger, then they have the ability to become fair and just leaders. Dictatorship, especially inherited dictatorship is an example that shows how no sense of cooperation can make someone a terrible leader. Kim Jong Un, the dictator of North Korea, has only had a sense of being in power, as the Kim Jong family have been in power for ages. He only knows what it is like to rule as his father has before him. The Kim Jong family are able to do whatever they please, while their people are dying of starvation and only are allowed to believe what they are told by the Kim Jongs. Kim Jong Un has also never had a sense of competition, since his position was inherited, which is a point that will be outlined in the next paragraph.
While a society should instill a sense of cooperation in its young people, it should also instill a sense of competition to them. If there is no competition, how will young people know that they want positions of leadership and power? The sense of competition will prepare them for campaigning and succeeding in order to get the positions that they want later in life. However, they will only succeed with this competition if they also have a sense of cooperation. The only people that I personally know in life that hold leadership positions as adults are people who faced competition and were in leadership positions as children. Examples of these competitions that may prepare young people for positions of leadership and power are high school debate teams, student body council, etc. Just as this sense of competition will help prepare young people for positions of leadership later in life, it will also help them to determine if they do not want to be in these leadership positions. Not everyone can hold leadership positions or even want to hold them.
In conclusion, I believe that societies should instill both a sense of cooperation and a sense of competition among its young people to prepare them for leadership positions. This gives them exposure to both sides which will ultimately make them better leaders.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 603, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'had' and 'examples'.
Suggestion: had never examples
... or what they want to adhere to if they never had examples to help them while being under someone ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, then, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 33.0505617978 206% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2659.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 550.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83454545455 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72353744207 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.385454545455 0.4932671777 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0506960811 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.608695652 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9130434783 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.17391304348 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276123776823 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112620941377 0.0831039109588 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112838689223 0.0758088955206 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226138101228 0.150359130593 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710851474029 0.0667264976115 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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