The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
According to the claim, young people should be trained for leadership in their fields by inculcating the value of cooperation instead of competition. I agree with this view as instilling sense of cooperation has a lot of advantages over sense of competition. In a company or in society, a person needs to work in a team to complete the assigned task. It can also be said that the efforts of group can yield better results than a single person. Thus, inculcating a sense of cooperation in youth is extremely beneficial to prepare them for leadership.
First, people who work in government or in industry have to interact with a lot of people in order to carry out their role effectively. If a person is good at cooperating with others in order to complete some work, he/she can do well in their job. For example, a manager who works in a company has to coordinate with his boss about the deadlines. At the same time, he has to manage his subordinates in order to get a good estimate of when the work can be completed. If the manager is unable to coordinate well with his subordinates and get a good estimate of how long it will take to finish a particular task, he can set an impossible deadline and put a lot of pressure on his subordinates. At the same time, he will be admonished by his boss in his team fails to complete the task in the given time. This inconvenience could have been avoided if the manager had learnt to cooperate well with people. Thus, instilling a sense of cooperation can help avoid many problems which would be faced by lack of cooperation.
Second, a task can be better done by having a cooperative arrangement between many individuals than a single person. If many people contribute something to a task, the work which one of them has to do is lesser; thus, avoiding stress due to excess workload. On the other hand, if a person refuses to cooperate, he/she will have to finish that work all by himself/herself; thus leading to excess stress and unnecessary workloads. Had the person been good at cooperating with others, he could have shared some of his work with some of his colleagues in his company and avoided the unnecessary stress.
Finally, cooperation is an integral part of the society - one cannot do everything by himself/herself. By living in a society, a person is expected to coordinate with others in performing various day-to-day tasks. For example, a person may have to take a bus to work, requiring him to coordinate with the driver of the bus in terms of timings. If the bus starts at 11 o' clock in the morning, it is imperative that the man reaches there before 11. In this way, cooperating with other people in a society is unavoidable. It can said that competition leads to maximization of potential - a healthy competition will improve everybody's level. However, healthy competition is very difficult to achieve and more often than not, it takes a unhealthy turn and becomes detrimental to the performance of the individuals.
Hence, I think that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership or even life in general is by inculcating the values of cooperation into them from a young age.
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 83
- As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious. 50
- According to a recent report by our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies act 62
- A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor. 54
- Sports stars movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility 47
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...k, he can set an impossible deadline and put a lot of pressure on his subordinate...
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'say'
Suggestion: say
...ple in a society is unavoidable. It can said that competition leads to maximization ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hieve and more often than not, it takes a unhealthy turn and becomes detrimental ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'well', 'as to', 'for example', 'i think', 'in general', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220228384992 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.166394779772 0.157235817809 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0750407830343 0.0880659088768 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0309951060359 0.0497285424764 62% => OK
Pronouns: 0.047308319739 0.0444667217837 106% => OK
Prepositions: 0.154975530179 0.12292977631 126% => OK
Participles: 0.0440456769984 0.0406280797675 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.94126170345 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0456769983687 0.030933414821 148% => OK
Particles: 0.00163132137031 0.0016655270985 98% => OK
Determiners: 0.10766721044 0.0997080785238 108% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0293637846656 0.0249443105267 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00978792822186 0.0148568991511 66% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3169.0 2732.02544248 116% => OK
No of words: 560.0 452.878318584 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65892857143 6.0361032391 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.58838876751 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.305357142857 0.366273622748 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.226785714286 0.280924506359 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.164285714286 0.200843997647 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125 0.132149295362 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94126170345 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 219.290929204 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430357142857 0.48968727796 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.5904845829 55.4138127331 91% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6194690265 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.4 23.380412469 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6122752792 59.4972553346 58% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.76 141.124799967 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 23.380412469 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.72 0.674092028746 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 45.0785714286 51.4728631049 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.71333333333 1.64882698954 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.502721162449 0.391690518653 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.117759142219 0.123202303941 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0882433783155 0.077325440228 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.499618759474 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154489604414 0.149214159877 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183409917373 0.161403998019 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11888848383 0.0892212321368 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.442505944532 0.385218514788 115% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0883609765816 0.0692045440612 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.373214621277 0.275328986314 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137397033585 0.0653680567796 210% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.5995575221 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.