One learns many lessons throughout their life from many people, starting from his or her parents at home. The prompt recommends that the best way to teach anyone is through noticing and praising one’s positive actions and turning their eye for an action which is seemed to be negative. I strongly disagree with this suggestion and argue that teaching shouldn’t be done through giving attention for two reasons.
To begin, neglecting actions which are perceived to be immoral or unacceptable doesn’t teach one to not continue doing those actions. For instance, if a student is stealing stuff from his or her classmates and if the student was caught by their teacher then not explaining how stealing stuff from others is bad could lead the student to believe that there is nothing wrong in stealing. This sets a bad example for him and many of his future actions could be based on this. It is important to acknowledge the wrongdoings of a student by the teacher and point it out to them so that they can understand their mistake and try not to repeat them in the future.
Further, one does not deserve attention for all of the good things they do. For instance, a boss who is supposed to aid and assist his employees shouldn’t praise his or her employees every time they complete their task on time. After all he is paying them to precisely do that. Praising an employee too much could make them overconfident and expect higher pay or a promotion.
One could argue that by praising one’s accomplishments and ignoring their mistakes the mentee would try to please their mentor’s by only doing actions which are perceived to be good and avoid one’s that are not. However, one won’t always be with their mentor and when they step out into the new world their actions may not be driven by the intention to satisfy their mentors but to receive acknowledgement from others. A teacher should acknowledge the goods and bads of their students but with a limit.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ough giving attention for two reasons. To begin, neglecting actions which are p...
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... try not to repeat them in the future. Further, one does not deserve attention ...
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...her, one does not deserve attention for all of the good things they do. For instance, a bo...
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... time they complete their task on time. After all he is paying them to precisely do t...
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...and expect higher pay or a promotion. One could argue that by praising one’s a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, after all, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 341.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81818181818 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58395548814 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533724340176 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8766004592 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.357142857 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3571428571 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217206558303 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077606009635 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106004814556 0.0758088955206 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13559259986 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819800460765 0.0667264976115 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.8420337079 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.