Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
How do you define selfishness? Its when a person disdains others while achieving something for himself. But dreams can be selfish is an absurd reasoning to make a person following worthy goals. I do not agree with the face that young peoples dream can be selfish.
When people are young they have enthusiasm to learn many things. They can be moulded easily. They are fragile. The elders around them have the responsibility to guide them to the path of righteousness.
If they are shown examples of the achievers its not surprising that young people start dreaming about something similar. Be it professions such as medicine, engineering,science , sports etc. Now Who can tell that these dreams are selfish. I mean how can they be selfish? They are trying to contribute something to the society. I would be dire mistake to make them alter their dreams.
On the superficial level it might look selfish. Doesn't mean that parents should make them do something which they do not like. For example a person who wants to pursue a career in business might be asked to pursue engineering because of parents own selfishness may be the father himself was an engineer. But will it really help the young in the future? It might likely happen that the young one studies engineering just for the sake of studying and because the parent has forced him. The young one will fail in his subject even if he clears it he will be working just for the sake of working in it. In India its fairly common that people study engineering first then pursue careers like modelling , business, govt jobs etc. Which is clearly an indication that the parents forced the child to choose "worthy" goal instead of their own dream.
Just like any claim the claim can other side as well. Young one's are usually moulded by what others are doing. May be a kind after some of his friends pursuing medicine wants to become a doctor. But a parent and his teachers have data about his performance in the related subjects and his understanding on that subjects. In that case it would be better for teacher to dissuade him to pick a worthy goal for him. Because if he doesn't he might clear his college but in the end university might reject him. He will have to face a lot of troubles then to choose a different career.
In the end , Young ones are building blocks of out future society. It would be better to allow them to follow their dreams rather than to make them choose goals which we feel worthy, based on our inherently selfish reasoning.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... young peoples dream can be selfish. When people are young they have enthusiasm t...
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Message: Consider using 'the surrounding elders'?
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...an be moulded easily. They are fragile. The elders around them have the responsibility to guide them t...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uide them to the path of righteousness. If they are shown examples of the achiever...
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Suggestion:
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'as for', 'for example', 'i mean', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206967213115 0.240241500013 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.190573770492 0.157235817809 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0696721311475 0.0880659088768 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0409836065574 0.0497285424764 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.102459016393 0.0444667217837 230% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.108606557377 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0368852459016 0.0406280797675 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5811654908 2.79330140395 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0368852459016 0.030933414821 119% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0799180327869 0.0997080785238 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0409836065574 0.0249443105267 164% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0184426229508 0.0148568991511 124% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2523.0 2732.02544248 92% => OK
No of words: 446.0 452.878318584 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65695067265 6.0361032391 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.311659192825 0.366273622748 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.19730941704 0.280924506359 70% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.12331838565 0.200843997647 61% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0762331838565 0.132149295362 58% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5811654908 2.79330140395 92% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 219.290929204 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491031390135 0.48968727796 100% => OK
Word variations: 55.3161282911 55.4138127331 100% => OK
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6194690265 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.3870967742 23.380412469 62% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3066926987 59.4972553346 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.3870967742 141.124799967 58% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3870967742 23.380412469 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.483870967742 0.674092028746 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.21349557522 230% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 34.1180384782 51.4728631049 66% => OK
Elegance: 1.05521472393 1.64882698954 64% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266032758326 0.391690518653 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0707485713363 0.123202303941 57% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0737970065434 0.077325440228 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.416521245714 0.547984918172 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130827217028 0.149214159877 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768487912461 0.161403998019 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497397398343 0.0892212321368 56% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.285329615576 0.385218514788 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0980662814467 0.0692045440612 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162033580871 0.275328986314 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334287814917 0.0653680567796 51% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.30420353982 264% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 3.66592920354 273% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.