The youth of the current generation are very ambitious and replete with ideas and dreams that they want to execute and achieve in life. While some of these dreams may be arising out of self-interest, it is rather naïve to think that these dreams are not worthy and that the youth should be dictated to work towards some few “worthy” goals. Furthermore, to believe that most people’s dreams are selfish and are only self-motivated is presumptuous, as past historical events- and dreams- will have you believe otherwise.
Picking up and following worthy goals in life is commendable and something that the society will praise. This does not go to say that only certain goals-which the society deems worthy- are to be followed in ones life’s pursuit. Individual and new goals motivated by one’s own dreams can also be worthy goals. When Martin Luther King Junior said in his famous speech that he had a dream to end the racial injustice and slavery in America, was it not a worthy goal? Or when Mahatma Gandhi had envisioned an independent country free from the British rule, was that dream too, unworthy ? It were these dreams that ignited the struggle for freedom in India and the paved the way for successfully abolishing slavery in America. Will anyone dare call these dreams unworthy in this day and age? This goes to show that no matter what is the stimulus behind dreams, they too can be worthy. Following one’s dreams may not necessarily be deemed being selfish. Take the same example as before – Mahatma Gandhi’s dream of an independent India wasn’t a selfish one. On the contrary, it was one which voiced the dreams of several million other Indians. This dream eventually became a realty, albeit with great struggle, and has laid down the path for the modern day India.
It is rather easy to advice young people to follow worthy goals. But what exactly are these worthy goals and who decides what is and what is not worthy? What one may find worthy, may not be worthy for someone else. A religious priest would advise his son to prioritize worship and prayer over everything else, whereas for a scientist, the worthy goal of finding the cure to cancer would be demanded of. The realm of virtues and worthiness is so vast that one could make a case for a bad deed to be worthy too. A young man today is better off following his dreams and ambitions rather than chasing some goal (for which he may not even have the skill) that the world views as worthy.
If everyone were to follow “worthy goals” while leaving aside their dreams and ambitions, then the world would not have developed as much as it has today. Perhaps man wouldn’t have stepped into outer space, women would be treated as inferior beings, America would still be bereft with racial differences and India would not be a free country. All because it was apparently too selfish to dream.
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- Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which 58
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 454, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f virtues and worthiness is so vast that one could make a case for a bad deed to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, furthermore, if, may, so, still, then, whereas, while, as for, as to, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 501.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82435129741 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59246015766 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534930139721 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7058074355 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.708333333 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296702646436 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095363753109 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736048551655 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189732880505 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351482315202 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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