Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
One of the things that many elderly people regret is that they didn't actively pursue their dreams when they were young, and because of that, they often advise young people to "follow their dreams." However, it is common to see many people forgoing their dreams because they feel that it would be too selfish of them to carry on with this path under the circumstances that they are in.
Under financial constraints, it would definitely seem wise to choose a more worthy goal in the short-term. Usually people dream of things that would be difficult for them to achieve in real life, distant from their reach. Take the example of becoming an artist or a professional violinist. Both of these careers require people to put in long hours of practice as well as hefty costs for buying art tools or a decent violin. People also deem that it's necessary to receive private tutoring in order to improve their skills, and adding on to that cost, many students go to study abroad to learn from world-renowned artists and professionals. Unless they are born in affluent families, pursuing a career in the artistic field would be a burden to people's families, so it would seem selfish if they obstinately pursue their dream.
However, pursuing a dream doesn't have to be something that overwhelms other family members. Even if people have a dream that may look selfish on the outset, they could find alternative ways to keep following their dreams. Many institutions offer scholarships to gifted children, and if this is not a viable option, people could get part-time jobs to save money for their dreams. It is common to see documentaries about people overcoming familial or educational hardships who successfully achieve their goals in life, inspiring many young people to do the same. If people are able to pursue their dreams on their own, they should be able to receive moral support from their family and friends, without any scorn about whether it's selfish or not.
The most crucial reason people have to follow their dreams is because that is what separates humans from animals. The primary role of animals is to survive in a predatory "eat or be eaten" world, but this is not the case for humans. People have the ability to think for themselves, and this is the reason why humanity could achieve such tremendous success in building a civilization. Without the dreams and ambitions our predecessors had, we wouldn't be able to live in such a developed society. It is not overreaching to say that pursuing dreams is one of the most fundamental desires of human beings, so there shouldn't be any limits standing in the way of people striving to achieve them.
In conclusion, even though people can be frustrated from following their dreams because they think it is selfish to think about only themselves, if they have to capability to pursue their dreams without infringing on other people's lives, they should put their foot down on what they want. Also, having a dream is human's basic instinct, so it shouldn't be frowned upon or be repudiated in any way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2547.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86998087954 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62833363772 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483747609943 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.6058154625 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.052631579 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5263157895 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68421052632 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298569682358 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965205721504 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573296572174 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188737612943 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437365109137 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.