Government funding has a detailed project allocating and proportionating funding to multiple areas. It is true that there are stratification and category of funding causes, and undeniably, helping those in hunger are of more importance than funding art, something not essential of survival. However, such comparison hold true in a simple conceptual comparison. In consideration of possible benefits and consequences of funding, the result depends on practical situation. The accountant of government aims to bring most profits to all citizens like smart investor. The reason given in the statement, although originated from kindness, fails to recognize the possible benefits of investing in art. It fails to provide a solid support for the claim, and the claim, though true in some scenarios, fails to hold true in many situations. I want to negate both the reason and the claim, providing some reasons why they do not hold true and providing benefits of funding art.
It is very true that those who are unemployed or disabled are in urgent need of government support, however, their plights cannot be solved by government subsidy. Unemployment rate is a great indicator of the overall economic status, which goes down when economy blooms, and drops when recession takes place. Apart from directly providing subsidies to them, the best solution is to excite economy growth thus creating job openings and improved national gross income. Since the industrial revolution, the death rate and overall poverty has dropped significantly in comparison with agriculture era. The rise of food production rate cured hunger and poverty. Admittedly, there will be a small population that suffer from disabilities, preventing them from getting a job interview and earning a living by hand. However, unlimited funding to those who simply are unwilling to work and live off on subsidies, is not fair to tax-payers.
Art is a great way to excite economy and provide job opportunities. Supporting art industry can lead to building new art galleries, increase needs of art supplies, attraction of art lovers and market of artworks. All of those can elevated people in economical plights by giving them jobs to support themselves, which is a better and fairer option than directly putting money into their hands. There are many cities that praise art as the center of attraction. Like Venice which is famous for their theatrical heritage, where Gonzalo boats with boatman singing Italian opera shifting along small cannels in the city, where masks of various shapes and sizes appear at the window of every shop windows, where tourists crowd the city every month of the year. Although investing in art seems unrelated with helping poor, it is actually a good way to generate local economy and provide persistent benefit to those in need.
Even in the case of extreme poverty where survival surmount any other desire, the decision should involve consideration of the future, because unless the plight is transitory, like experiencing extreme drought or war, making decisions to quell the temporary thirst will not bring long-term benefit. Standing on the perspective of government officials, the upmost importance is create most profits using limited funding, and investments can bring profits in the next ten years. The misconceptions by the proponents of the claim is not recognizing the profits of art business and instead think of it as a waste of funding. Changing a stereotypical view will shed some light into the plight.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'those cans'?
Suggestion: this can; those cans
...t lovers and market of artworks. All of those can elevated people in economical plights b...
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Line 7, column 378, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'created'.
Suggestion: created
...ent officials, the upmost importance is create most profits using limited funding, and...
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Line 7, column 528, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ceptions by the proponents of the claim is not recognizing the profits of art business and instead...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, so, thus, apart from, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2956.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 562.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25978647687 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84191944349 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 215.323595506 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542704626335 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 916.2 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6111935797 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.24 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.48 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2 5.21951772744 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233785992101 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574254346726 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482087802944 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121847722429 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461560065415 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 158.0 100.480337079 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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