Given that there are so many various problems unsolved in a country, it seems the Government should resolve the most serious ones as the starvations and unemployments. Compared with the help for art as funding, these two problems are more important when we consider all of them separately. While in my opinion, as a government of a nation, not all the problems being solved one by one, there would be a collective way of resovling these matters especially when the problems are all related to money. I will address my views as belows.
To begin with, as we consider each of the three problems, the citizen still starving and unmployed are the main issues as all of our consideration. Just imagine that you can not talk with a poor person with no income from some undeveloped area about various kinds of arts, he is hungry and he need money. Thus it is true that a resposible government should put the battle against poverty and unemployment at the first place. Viewing through the histroy we hardly can not find such cases, like the new China, after establishment in 1949, developing economy is the first misson for the whole nation, in last century, most of the foreign contries consider Chinese as poor and weak, which is totally different now.
While it seems there is no balance between the first mission that fighting against poverty as well as unemployment and funding art, of course not. Where there is a will, there is a way.
So the art varies in different kinds. The first reason why the authority should fund the art as we research this issue, I believe it it because the art needs help as the people who have no jobs and still in starvation. Especcially some kind of unmaterial cultrual heritage like opera and some skills at the edge of extinction, they need the official help. So here the problems in font of most countries are both from people's poor conditon and the dying arts. However, if the government funds the art, it will be a lucrative way of making poor people out of starvation as well as getting jobs. A new open gallary needs people to run and offer maintenance, so the jobs are created, with the incoming visitor to the gallary, the problems of poverty and unemployment could be solved in one day. In the wester of China, there are still lots of people who are under the poverty line evaluated by authority, while some of them under the help of the government started local film production base because of the exotic scenery of the western part of China, some of the places look like the surface of the Mars, there were some scientifc fiction movies filmed in these places, which raised local employment. Also, in the middld of China, there are some local paintings made by ancient ways, but this painting skill was known by fewer and fewer people, while under the investment of authorty which opened sucn training schools, these kind of painting revived and sold a abroad.
In all, we need to change our views when we meet the issue like this , there will be a balance.
- TOEFL T P O 33 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, still, thus, well, while, kind of, of course, as well as, in my opinion, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2483.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 531.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67608286252 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47849804138 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4934086629 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.9862574593 60.3974514979 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.684210526 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9473684211 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167512709978 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542661599744 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051078932936 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884830191421 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257842453002 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.8420337079 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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