Claim: People who say they are bored should look inward rather than blaming the circumstances in which they find themselves.
Reason: Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self-motivation.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Motivation is the aim of studies in several fields of science, from phylosophy to psychology and medicine. While there is no concensus regarding the best ways to motivate someone, most researchers agree that self-motivation is the primary source of will power that encourages people to be more imaginative and prevents people from being bored. However, outside factors often contribute to diminish one's self-motivation, resulting in a situation where a person may have to work very hard in order to find an inner answer to the problems one might find somewhen. However, with some professional help, it's possible to go around any problematic situation one might have to deal with. Therefore, I agree with the statement that Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self-motivation, while conceiving that diferent circumstances may require some outside help.
First of all, it is necessary to explore the reasons boredom takes place in somebody's life. Very often, people living apparently good lives, with successful jobs and happy marriages, in secret hide problems from the society and even from their close friends. This became more and more common once our private lives started to be replaced with social medias and the modern wway of communications. People are worried whether they can post a nice picture from their vacations, instead of trying to actually enjoy the trip. That kind of behaviour is causing people to live unreal made up situations, bringing them to a very deep feeling of frustration with their real and boring lives. The first step to to prevent all that from happening is to change the attitude regarding the reason one's own self-steem and self-motivation is being mined. In the social media example, people who usually post a lot of pictures should stop doing that, and maybe starting to live in a way they actually want to. In some cases, a simple act can be the solution for a complex problem.
On the other hand, difficult situations often require special atention. Boredom, if not treated, may involve into some clinic deseases, such as depression. And the causes for that may vary from person to person: the death of a close relative can be less damaging for some people than breaking up a relationship for others. That diverse range of behaviour often requires professional help. It is possible that, in some cases, only a psychologist or a doctor will be able to help. Even in these cases, the most important thing is to realize is that finding the solution for the problem requires self-kownledge. The doctor will only be able to help if
To sum up, while the outside factors are far from being irrelevant when boredom takes over someone's life, it is important to realize that the best way of recovering from that is through self-kownledge and motivation, what will lead to a feeling of satisfaction. Of course there are situations that a person must seek for professional help since people cannot solve all the problems for themselves. But the primary factor for changing an unpleaseant situation you face in your life is by changing yourself.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 399, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'reasons'' or 'reason's'?
Suggestion: reasons'; reason's
... of all, it is necessary to explore the reasons boredom takes place in somebodys life. ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'someones'' or 'someone's'?
Suggestion: someones'; someone's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, apparently, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, while, kind of, of course, such as, first of all, in some cases, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2579.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 513.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02729044834 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83943004286 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530214424951 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 812.7 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3888613318 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.227272727 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3181818182 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77272727273 5.21951772744 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15494167049 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438021111112 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386066034761 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931116563355 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032209433768 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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