Claim: While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self-satisfaction, it should really be a source of embarrassment.
Reason: Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self-motivation.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
boredom is the state of being disinterested in one’s own surroundings. The author makes the following premises regarding it: boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self motivation, boredom is often expressed with a sense of self- satisfaction, and boredom should be a source of embarrassment. I disagree with all these premises, especially the last two, to a large extent for the following reasons.
The first premise states that boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self motivation. Even though I do concede that this premise may be true in some cases. For example, a student who finished all of his work and has some free time at the end of the day may end up being bored because they cannot imagine anything interesting that they can do such as; going out of friends, reading…..etc. However beyond this concession, I believe that, in most cases, boredom arises from the engagement in activities that are inherently unchallenging and unstimulating. therefore, it is unfair for the author to blame a person’s motivational and imaginative capacity as the culprit for their boredom. For instance, cleaning dishes all day at a restaurant would lead to boredom, writing reports and doing paperwork all day would leave the person uninspired and, thus, bored at the end of the day. this leads me to the author’s second premise.
boredom is expressed with a sense of self satisfaction. On the contrary, since boredom often arises from the person being in an unstimulating and unfulfilling environment, boredom is thus an expression of dissatisfaction with that environment. Lastly, the author states that boredom should be a source of embarrassment. that is such a naïve response. because boredom gives the person the capacity of daydreaming which, as several study have shown, can increase creativity and novel ideas. Additionally, boredom provides a person with the opportunity of having the time to reflect their source of dissatisfaction and make the desired changes or modifications.
In conclusion, boredom arises from existing in uninspiring conditions, it is an expression of discontent and, therefore, should be considered as a symptom that something needs to be altered in one’s life and an opportunity to make these alterations rather then perceiving it as something that is embarrassing.
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...desired changes or modifications. In conclusion, boredom arise...
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...s something that is embarrassing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, may, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in most cases, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 371.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37735849057 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27649735782 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506738544474 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.6178243758 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.352941176 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2941176471 5.21951772744 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36033845672 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135846632629 0.0831039109588 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144039744952 0.0758088955206 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24497117453 0.150359130593 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126155696387 0.0667264976115 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.