College students should be encouraged to pursue subject that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
The choice of college major is not trivial one. In fact, it is not common for entering students dropping our the program after months, perharps years, and then another decision is going to be ruining as the previous one is. The prompt recommends that students should listen their “inside heart voice” when choosing fields in their college study, rather than follow the current “hot trend” jobs. I sstrongly agree with the suggestion that students should look inward rather than outward when choosing a college for three reasons.
To begin, the job market is changing with dramatical speed. A hot job in a cretain decade can be the dying job in the following one. Therefore, choosing a profession based solely on the demanding of society is to take a short-term perspective. For example, in the 1950s through the 1980s, nuclear power had become a phenominon of society. it is not because of ther wide rages of applications in nuclear weapons , but also in the nuclear energy. At that time, scientists and engineerings working at this fields had received very competive salary and the job market on this field was very active. However, no sooner did the nagative effects of nuclear energy be raised, especially after the diaster in fukushima nuclear plant, then the this kind of energy is going to dimished and replaced by green enegry like bio-energy, solar, and wind energy. hence, a plenty amount of student who entering college in the 1970s, hardly got a job after graduation, because of the vacancy for this position was limited when the number of nuclear energy plants were eradicated. The example above demonstrated that the job market is significantly fluctuated by the time. hence if students choosing their future career solely based on the high opportunity to get a job at the time he or she make a decision, they might be soon get disappoirted when their chosen job lose the “hot” position on the market after four or five years of studying the colleges.
Furthermore, even if it is assumed that the job market is stable for at least ten years from the time of making a decision, students should pursue their own passion and penchan because of their happiness and satisfactions at working place. For example, if a student who is apssionate at drawing, but choose a computer science as he or she major because of plethora of lucrative job opportunity after graduation. she run the risks of finding herself in the field she hates. she might have hard days at college with plenty of abstract subjects and at the workplace later on. she might still run codes, complete the tasks before deadlines but she find no satisfation while doing those work. The scientists at Harward University recently proclaimed that happiness and life satisfation is closely related to their favorites at jobs. In other words, the example well illustrates typical case of students who did not do what they love and their work hardly bring to their life happiness.
In conclusion, students should follow their own inner voice in chosing a college or the major job, rather than randomly take a “hot” job on the market. because of the skyrocking changing of the demand on the market which hardly ensure the bright future with high job opportunity after graduation. it is also because of their own happiness and satisfation in life, which is achieved only by conducting their own dream jobs, not theirs, not the society’s ones.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ot theirs, not the society's ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2889.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 577.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00693240901 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72193938866 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483535528596 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 882.9 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.788112395 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.375 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0416666667 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70833333333 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1362199376 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404699205108 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473351923404 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101598848863 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582516435046 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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