cooperation & competition
Undoubtedly, one of the foremost and paramount ambitions of all human beings is being prosperous, and they always make an effort to attain this purpose. However, success has different meanings among people, and there are a lot of factors that have effects on it. Indeed, what people learn in young age play a significant role in both their own life and society. While a large number of people believe that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competicion, others do not agree with this idea. Neverthelss, in my point of view, although the later idea has a number of positive aspects, the former one is more beneficial.
Instilling in young poeple a sense of competion has a number of advantages for both the young people and the society, such as causing them to utilize their whole capacity, as well as causing the industry, government, and etc. to not lag behind others. In the modern society in which the population has increased more and more, most poeple desires high quality lifestyle. In the modern society in which the population has increased more and more, all people eager a high quality lifestlye. However, it is not an easy work and sometimes it would become frustrated for people to achieve this accomplishemnet. The incentive is a factor that helps people to overcome any frustration, and cause them to make their best to achieve their desires. When there is competition between people in the society, they would have a motivation to be better than their peers. Being the better one, could not be accomplished unless peole work hard to do their best. In other words, competion would cause people to utilize their ability in the best way. Moreover, in the world, there are a great number of governments, industries, and so forth. all of which want to become superior; however, it could not be happen if they do not consider others. Therefore, the leader should be able to compete with others, and make decisions while considering their oponents if wants to be successful.
In spite what mentioend before, it is not debatable that Instilling young people a sense of cooperation not competion also has a number of benefits for both the person and the society, such as leading them to be more successful, as well as causing the people to do not have any hostallity with others. In each industry or other institutations there are various parts in which there are a large number of workers. Since the mind of each person is limited, and he could not consider all the aspects of the work, he might not be able to be a perfect member for it. On the other hand, when workers are learnt to cooperate together, they would share their knowlege and their experiences that cause them to consider all the aspects of the work, and cause the insitiuation to be much successful. Moreover, when there is competition between people, each person attemps to be successful, and they will feel success if others rlag behind them. Therefore, they would not share their knowledge with others, , and even they might attempt to cause others to not be successful. It will brings an unfavorable atmosphere in the society. However, when thay have learnt to cooperate, instead of these harmful behaviors, they would help their peers to improve.
In recapitulation, each person depending on his characteristics and his experiences belive that either it is more benefifial to instill young people a sense of cooperation or a sense of competion. According to what discussed above, the society will benefit more by the people who have the sense of cooperation. However, it does not mean that the sense of competition has only negative impacts. In fact, there will be some sense of competiton to cause people to have motivation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, in fact, such as, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3182.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 654.0 442.535393258 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86544342508 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75110691233 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.39755351682 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1000.8 704.065955056 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Interrogative: 5.0 0.740449438202 675% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4369127394 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.724137931 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5517241379 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37931034483 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 10.2758426966 234% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0587209718428 0.243740707755 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0177779370377 0.0831039109588 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331371175779 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0467495055872 0.150359130593 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243801749886 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
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