Educational Institutes or Schools as I see it are a place where students go to learn the basics. Learn how to make friends, Study find their like or dislikes and I believe that schools should galvanize that attitude in the students. Schools are where students are offered variety of fields to try Academia, Drama, Sports, Arts and craft so on and so forth. Students should get a choice to try anyone of them and figure out what do they like. I am emphasize that it’s upto the Student to make the choice.
I believe schools should not Dissuade students into choosing anything. Schools are good for the students to experience a surrounding which they can control out of the home, away from parents supervision, This gives them the independence to think and make decisions on their own. Schools provide kids the tools and let the kid choose which one he/she wants to play with. Schools should not make the decision or persuade him to choose. This is something the student is in school for to be independent and to learn to make your own decision. Allthough the responsiblity of the school is to motivate the student keep them enthusiastic. For example Michael Jordan’s coach failed him in the basketball tryouts. Steve jobs was told by his school that there is no future in making computers. All these examples will tell that schools should not influence the student’s decision.
In addition to motivating schools should work with their parents to understand the expectation from the parents. For example in India it’s highly demotivated to choose Arts, Commerce as the subjects in high school because for parents its either their worry for child’s job opportunity or the social standard. For example Sachin Tendulkar ,in the world know as God of Cricket, could have been at this feat if the parent’s would have had fear of future and society cloud their judgement. SO parent’s involvement is also necessary.Its not all that school is the only one reposible for shaping a student’s life rather it’s a collaboration of all the people who are in the student’s life.
Again I would recommend a student’s choice is the key here. No one should influence or make the decision for him/her.Its the student who should try and pick what he/she would like to pursue. One would argue at this point that a student is too young and does not know the world any better. This reason is actually what makes the job of schools and parents all the more important that they motivate the student they provide them with all the support that is needed. Every interest is different , Every person is different so no one one knows for sure hows the world out there in a particular field so a student needs is support.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, so, thus, as to, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2278.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86752136752 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.759607187 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485042735043 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2378323395 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0434782609 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.347826087 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65217391304 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150129343347 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512666896279 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372198346974 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101033650795 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351492831865 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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