Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people whom they serve.
In a democracy, an expectation is generally held that elected officials serve the people. However, some people put forth that government officials should rely on their own judgement, rather than carry out the will of the people they serve without question. In truth, the answer likely lies somewhere in-between these views. The people that elected--if this is a democractic scenario--the official have a right to see their views carried out. If a official was to only follow their individual judgement and ignore the people's, that would likely lead to disapprobation from the people. However, the government official should also able to judge situations fairly, especially if they serve a populace of mixed view points.
A government official may have a very different view than the people he or she serves. For example, a president may have conservative views but perhaps the people of his country are more liberal. This scenario is somewhat unlikely, since usually a liberal populace elects a liberal president. However, what is more common is that roughly half the populace may be conservative and half liberal. In that case, the government official has a duty to a variety of different people and their will. Everyone is his or her country is important, yet the official cannot carry out every person's will. In this case, a official must exercise their own judgement.
However, while using their own judgement they should be considering the will of the people. The official cannot go with their own individual opinion alone and disregard the people's. They should consider the populaces opinions thoughtfully and then come to a conclusion. To ignore the populace and carry out what the official deems the right way will create ill feeling. For example, the Pew Research Center conducted a survey in early 2019 that concluded that 75 percent of people in the United States has declining trust in the government. There was a multitude of reasons mentioned, and one was officials not listening to the people they represent.
In conclusion, government officials must walk a delicate tightrope of listening to the people and also making their own judgements. When it comes down to it, an official is there to serve the people who elected them. Yet, if they represent people with divergent views they must also be ready to make decisions based on their own individual judgement.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 446, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ight to see their views carried out. If a official was to only follow their indiv...
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Line 5, column 606, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y out every persons will. In this case, a official must exercise their own judgem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16153846154 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75132028554 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482051282051 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1397413158 60.3974514979 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.5 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7272727273 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.427223762906 0.243740707755 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133062547011 0.0831039109588 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115588322048 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280347029374 0.150359130593 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651657025495 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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