Governments shuold offer a free university education to any students who have been admitted to a university but who cannot offer the tuition
Higher education, as a major way of providing various kinds of talents for our society has always been a hot issue for most countries. And the speaker argues that governments should pay the tuition fo the students who are admitted to universities but can not afford it. While I admit that the statement has its reasons, I mostly disagree with it because it ignores the consequences it may bring.
On one hand, this suggestion if it were carried out, would bring several benefits for the country. First, the educational level of the whole country will improve because students who may give up the admission as the result of poverty can study in the universities and they do not need to spend so much time on part-time jobs. In China, the tuition of the university a year is around 10,1000 RMB is much higher than the whole year's salary of some poor family in some remote villages. How can we expect that most students like them will continue their universities regardless of the economic conditions of their families? For the country, there will be more workers who receive the higher education and can do more contributions to the development of the country if the government could pay the tuitions for them. Besides, it will also help prevent the solidification of the classes and promote the equality of the society. For instance, it is almost the only way for Chinese students from poor families to get into higher level of class by receiving better education. And the possibility of changing the future by education not ony encourages the students to study harder but also to some extent relieves the social contradictions of different classes.
On the other hand, this statement is on the assumption that the budget of the country is rather abundant. If we just ignore the assumption and carry out the policy blindly, it will delay the development of the country. Supposing that there is only 4% of the GDP for Chinese education, it would be up to 5% if the government carried out the policy in China. Then, the budget for other fields like technology would be less, which would impede the development of technology thus leading to less revenue coming from technology. Only when the proportion of the budget on different fields is balanced, the whole benefit of the country can reach the maximum.
Furthermore, some students and some local officials may collude to defraud the government of the tuition. For instance, a classmate of me whose family is not really so poor, however, wants the money for some luxury goods forged a proof that his family was extremely poor though his family was not as rich as the most families in our class. Our university would not bother to look into the details considering that there are so many students and the money is provided by the government. This example illustrates that it needs more considerations if we really wish this policy can work efficiently.
From all discussed above, I would like to mention some of my considerations though I know that this issue is too complex to give an effective and complete alternative suggestion in this composition. Firstly, the government does not have to be the sole source of the tuition; the successful alumnus and the some rich companies can also be the donator. In addition, poverty is one but not only requirement to apply for this tuition.
To sum up, while the statement has its good intentions, I mostly object to it because it also ignores the consequences it may bring about.
- Cliam: the best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heros or its role models.Reason: heros and role models reveal a society's highest ideals. 50
- In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being influenced by past achievement within that field. 79
- Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. 66
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. 66
- Universities should require every student take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...,1000 RMB is much higher than the whole years salary of some poor family in some rem...
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Line 5, column 438, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... much higher than the whole years salary of some poor family in some remote villa...
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Line 17, column 307, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...tuition; the successful alumnus and the some rich companies can also be the donator....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, really, so, then, thus, while, for instance, in addition, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 12.9106741573 256% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2900.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 597.0 442.535393258 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85762144054 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73412811846 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455611390285 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 910.8 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6512181783 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.833333333 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156466115728 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482660188567 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660428956136 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784826683802 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681182227296 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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