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Importance of specific career path and pursuing single field of study

Choice of one's career path is not a trivial one. Being focused is imperative for an successfull career. The given prompt claims that multidisciplinary education is overrated and suggests that education must be focused on specific career paths. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the given claim and argue that a student must pursue specific career path and undertake only courses aligned with the goal, for these three reasons.

First, students must be afforded with the liberity to choose a career path according to their proclivity. Such choice would have an inherent attachement to the child, for good, further invariably motivating to work hard towards the goal. For instance, great entreprenuers such as Elon Musk and Bill Gates voluntarily chose to build a startup which we all know by the names of SpaceX and Microsoft Inc. respectively. If such career path would have be enforced by the system, it is higly likely that they would not have been self motivated to the extent to actually succeed. This example illustrates how a freedom to choose one's career augments the chances to succeed.

Furthermore, single area of study would enable oneself to focus on interests and pursue what makes them happy. It is imperative to realize one's latent potential and talent. For instance, a prodigy having extraordinary swimming skills should be able to pursue a career in swimming. He/she should not be mandated to pursue trivial paths such as engineering or medicine etc. It would help inculcate the skills and make him/her well adept. It is highly likely that such child might strive to follows the leads of Michael Pheps and bring glory to the nation, in near future. This illustrates how a specific career path help realize one's latent potential.

Finally, in this ever increasing globalized world, it is vital to be well adept to face stiff competition from all facades of life. One simply cannot belabor about a career path and end up being 'Jack of all trades, master of none'. For instance, we are all aware that there are potentially thousands of applications for one job opening. As the advents of Artificial intelligence and robotics is taking over the industry, the need of human resource is decreasing. To conter such threats, one must be highly skilled in his field, to negate the such advers consequence, if any. The ability to think, however, lies with human which cannot be supplanted by machine.

Of course, some might argue that we must strive to become a 'well rounded person' and must having overall skills. However, this is true upto certain extent, but cannot be attributed to highly important matters such as one's career path and college major. Such courses can be provided as electives, where one can voluntarily choose, if he/she wishes to. Being focused would help us negate the competition, relaize our potential and keep us self motivated to work hard and achieve the set goal. Therefore, we must encourage students to pursue specific career path and undertake single area of study in college.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, of course, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2529.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 504.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01785714286 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62948781928 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513888888889 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7587515401 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.6666666667 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.62962962963 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270031597652 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748300457259 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914434522312 0.0758088955206 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160625043945 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721332851216 0.0667264976115 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, of course, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments