There is hardly any doubt against the role of prison system. But does the unpleasantness of imprisonment really help to deter offenders to commit violent crime? Additionally, does every violent crime have notorious reason behind? This very questions quell me to agree with the assertion thoroughly. Below I will defend my standpoint with effective argument.
First of all, all offenders should be punished for their wrong doings, and some of those wrong doings are much more violent than any others. Those, who commit that extreme violent crime should be punished severely in order to deter them from any further violent crime. But that severe punishment can’t perform it’s role to deter offenders from violent crime all the time. Admittedly, severe punishment is active from the very beginning of law enforcement, yet crimes haven’t declined at the level that have to, and that’s so because of the perception of offenders and variation of crimes. Violent crimes are conspicuously those that are relatively gruesome, and effect most in the society: killing, raping, drugs trafficking and the likes. Those who commit this sort of crimes are very motivated to do so. Think about drug trafficking, a very notorious act, is done for money, and those offenders related to this crime have venality for money. Hence, imprisonment effects little to prevent themselves from committing that same crime again.
Every crime doesn’t possess the same reason to break out. Some commit violent crime from a stand that makes them commit that sort of crime. Consider, a short tempered person who can’t control his anger, can kill a person who has raped that person’s sister or wife. Killing a person is undoubtedly an abhorrent act, but that person who has just killed a guy for raping his relatives, needs imprisonment that would help him to reform and manage his anger rather than unpleasant environment.
Another fact has to be considered at the time of imposing unpleasant environment on an offender, and that is his true participation in a violent crime. Innocence often gets punishment in many judiciary system where there is a lack of transparency, accountability. An innocent, who becomes victim of falsification, becomes crestfallen. He, where has to have the right to get free from the accusation, can’t be put into a situation where unwarranted unpleasant imprisonment is imposed on him. This very act will make him resentful to the law, leaving him prone to commit violent act when he emancipates from the prison.
In conclusion, imprisonment is a system, that helps an offender to reform himself, and deter himself from committing any kind of violent crime further. Whereas, the severe imprisonment can undoubtedly act negatively.
- Contemporary art (painting, music, literature, etc.) is absent from the lives of most people, since it is primarily created only for the enjoyment of other artists. Art should instead be created purely for popular understanding and appreciation. -GRE Issu 58
- Most cultures encourage individuals to sacrifice a large part of their own personalities in orderto be like other people. Thus, most people are afraid to think or behave differently becausethey do not want to be excluded. 58
- Most important discoveries or creations are accidental: it is usually while seeking the answerto one question that we come across the answer to another. 79
- Students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends, and conceptsthat help explain those facts. Students who have learned only facts have learned very little. 50
- Students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends, and conceptsthat help explain those facts. Students who have learned only facts have learned very little. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 225, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun transparency seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lack of transparencies'.
Suggestion: a lack of transparencies
...in many judiciary system where there is a lack of transparency, accountability. An innocent, who becom...
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Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ting any kind of violent crime further. Whereas, the severe imprisonment can undoubtedl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, really, so, whereas, as to, in conclusion, kind of, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2339.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 441.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30385487528 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92750175135 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521541950113 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.4367268639 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4583333333 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.375 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 21.0 5.13820224719 409% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326416054605 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101803169802 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955251751636 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186470868509 0.150359130593 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655747373554 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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