With no doubts, technology has made our life better. It made it easier to perform the tedious tasks and even the easy ones were turned easier. It allowed us to save our time and in many occasions to save our physical health. It indeed made our lives more productive. It has been incorporated into every part of our daily lives. Beginning with the coffee maker that make our coffee in a minute to help us start the day with a fresh and focused minds to the invention of rockets that are being sent to the space to study the outer world.
With all this evidence I introduced I don't completely agree with the assumption that was made in the statement. The assumption says that reliance on technology in our daily lives has decreased our thinking abilities. However, I will give some examples to refute this assumption. Before the recolution of technology for example, factories relied completely on workers to do every single task in the work. But nowadays and as a consequence of technology utilization, almost all factories use robotic systems to do the work in the factory. So basically by technology utilization people were free from devoting their time to solve simple problems like simple and repetitive tasks in factories and are instead putting more time to use their minds and thinking abilities to come up with new inventions that can serve humanities such as robotics systems in factories.
Also, technology has allowed massive explosion and exchange of information through the internet. It became easier to find answers to any question that could come up your way. Simply, if you want to know a piece of information in any field you would open your laptop with one press and type your question and be ready to get millions of search results in only parts of a second. You can definitely benefit from all the resources to deepen your knowledge.
In addition, I find the claim exaggerating to a certain extent because for example, doctors as everyone else use technology in their work. They use devices that can scan your body, predict your temperature or they might use online medical portals and … etc. But no matter what, they would never rely on technology alone to treat a patient. They will rely on their minds and medical knowledge in the first place. So you will never see a doctor diagnosing a patient based on only his/lab results without doing a physical examination for the patient.
And after all, it's humans with all their intelligence, creativite minds and abilities, who create this amazing technology and will still invent more and more to serve this planet. Technology is continuly challenging people to find answers and solutions to the problems and questions technology has to bring with it every day.
On the other hand, I have myself experienced the negative effects of relying completely on technology. For example, I have noticed that since I started using my mobile phone for typing, my spelling errors have increased dramatically. And I attribute this to the correcting features that mobile phones have on them. And I notice this especially when I have to write with my hands and it seems that my mind got programmed to an external factor to correct word spelling for me. Another example, if a student didn't use the study tutorials provided on the internet wisely, I mean if the student copy the answers for the questions and assignments without trying to understand them or even challenging him/her self to try solving them by her/him self this will kind of "impair" their thinking ability.
So I believe, technology appearance has made our lives more advanced and allowed us to use our imagination and thinking to tackle the problems that come our way . and benefiting from is truly depends on the way people us it
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 50
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 54
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be 16
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 58
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... occasions to save our physical health. It indeed made our lives more productive. ...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... indeed made our lives more productive. It has been incorporated into every part o...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... With all this evidence I introduced I dont completely agree with the assumption th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hnology has to bring with it every day. On the other hand, I have myself experie...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...g for me. Another example, if a student didnt use the study tutorials provided on the...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...to tackle the problems that come our way . and benefiting from is truly depends on...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...tackle the problems that come our way . and benefiting from is truly depends on the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is truly depends on the way people us it
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, after all, as to, for example, i mean, in addition, in fact, kind of, no doubt, such as, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 33.0505617978 269% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 58.6224719101 154% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3149.0 2235.4752809 141% => OK
No of words: 642.0 442.535393258 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90498442368 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03365860172 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69952463866 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 314.0 215.323595506 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489096573209 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 1009.8 704.065955056 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6815841401 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.966666667 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0589188020487 0.243740707755 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0158374824521 0.0831039109588 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0266804224008 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0311015478188 0.150359130593 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209596654 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 100.480337079 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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