A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how those examples shape your position.
Nowadays, almost all of countries in this world require their students to study in the same national curriculum at least fifteen years before they enter college. While many reasonable think that this is the best way to develop potential of the children, actually command student to study all subjects which sometimes do not benefit to their future is nugatory.
There are many students who don’t know what they prefer to do or what they will be in the future; standard national curriculum maybe benefit to them to find their hidden potential. For someone, however, who really know what they want to do in the future, this national curriculum will loss their time to generate something benefit to our world. Isaac Newton, one of the well-known physicists in history, also have a problem to follow national curriculum. He is not good in religion or democratic but force to learn follow trend in that period. He was not a wise student in his hometown; nevertheless, when he went to university and study what he was apposite; he became a brilliant one and generate many theory which become our rule today. If he could persuade what he matched since he was young, we maybe have more knowledge now.
For scientist like Newton they still have a time in university to develop their potential. On the other hand, some specialist job, such as athlete or musician, require to practice and learn since children was so young. Many athlete nowadays face a problem that they have to allocate their precious time to learn something that no meaning to their life for both current and future. They loss opportunity to practice in more detail of their job. If they can choose to follow special curriculum since primary school, they may become the most famous musician of athlete and make the country be famous.
Standard national curriculum is a good way for student who don’t know about their future and cannot find their inside potential. But this way does not benefit to everyone there are some people that know themselves and want to spend their valuable time in the right thing. In order to make our new generation’s future better, we should compel student to find their actual potential as soon as possible.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Nowadays, almost all of countries in thi...
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Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to follow'
Suggestion: to follow
...ligion or democratic but force to learn follow trend in that period. He was not a wise...
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Line 5, column 706, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun theory seems to be countable; consider using: 'many theories'.
Suggestion: many theories
... he became a brilliant one and generate many theory which become our rule today. If he coul...
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Line 9, column 170, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'practicing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: practicing
...b, such as athlete or musician, require to practice and learn since children was so young. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, well, while, at least, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9335106383 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53308656736 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494680851064 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4104503114 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.9375 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 5.21951772744 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176443154012 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643967644724 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605786295773 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124533594846 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716543217382 0.0667264976115 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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