People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
[Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.]
The speaker asserts that people’s behavior is determined by forces. There are some kinds of people who only follow their way without influence by others. However, these people are the minority in the world. In my point of view, family, peer’s surroundings, and society can be forces, which have a considerable effect on people’s behavior. Therefore, I strongly agree with the speaker.
To begin with, the family affects our hobby, choice of vocation, and value system. As parents’ children, people imitate their parent’s behavior, and they are eager to follow their parents’ occupation. For example, if their parents are doctors, they are more likely to be a doctor as well in the future. With parents’ assistance, children can follow the way in life, fulfilling them to facilitate career development in the future. Whereas in the process of learning to value systems and skill development, parents also play a crucial role; For ensuring that children can form a positive value system, parents have to point out the negative behavior. In sum, people’s behavior is affected by family.
Secondly, peer pressure influences our choice, since mainstream influences our behavior overwhelmingly, including study, vocation, and hobby. When studying at school, students stay with others for a long time. Due to long time getting along with classmates, students’ behavior is affected by each other; For instance, When students applied the major in the university, peer’s decision will affect their choice. In a word, people’s behavior is influenced by peers easily.
Finally, society influences people’s behavior, because the law and culture also influence our behavior and choice. Living in the country, people have to follow the law, and culture of the country. The country’s law causes a restriction on people. In some countries, people have no freedom of speech, and they are incapable of expressing opinions easily. Whereas in other countries having freedom of speech, people can express their opinion without any restrictions. In brief, society affects people’s behavior.
To sum up, family, peer’s surrounding, and society influences people’s behavior. As a result, I agree with what the speaker says.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in brief, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 345.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50144927536 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85065648335 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530434782609 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4193102378 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5217391304 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52173913043 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165599173751 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584142513736 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314978317617 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103873736889 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387066624773 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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