People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Consciousness which controls our behaviors is no doubt one of the most mysterious thing in this universe, attracting so many great nature scientists' attentions like the Nobel Prize winters in physics Feynman and Crick and scholars from social science. And some people argue that people's behavior is almost determined by forces from outside. I have different attitudes on this statement if I consider it from social science and physics.
I totally agree this statement if I treat myself as a social scientist because human as a product of the society can not get out of the influence of the society. In other words, all things which determined our behaviors like the way of thinking, views of the world and life, qualities are built from the society which includes human and environment. For instance, the famous racist Hitler who was the supreme leader of the nazism deemed the Jew as the most inferior nation and slaughtered them during the Second World War. Hitler just took advantage of the religious conflict and the public' envy the richness of the Jew. Obviously, the public did not hate the Jew to the extent that they were glad to kill them and they were just hugely influenced at that kind of atmosphere. And for Hitler himself, he was also the product of the society at that time and we could roughly deduce how he built his view of this world from his biography. What is more, even a common worker who work every day can not escape the impact from the society. The reason why he chooses this kind of job, why he treats his boss and family with different attitudes, why he loves this kind of food can be roughly explained from the people and environment around him if we consider it deeply. The following special cases explain why the statement claims "largely" instead of "absolutely". It is a particularly salient example that some crazy killers with metal disease are found carrying abnormal genes. And they are born with propensity for violence even if they live in a totally normal family, which is beyond our understanding from the standpoint of social science. All of these example align with the statement.
However, I would argue that human behaviors are totally controlled by forces from outside if I consider it from physical standpoint. As we all know, a human from the physical standpoint is no more than a pile of atoms though it is still a mystery how these atoms produce the consciousness. And if we treat the pile of atoms as a system, we can regard the behavior as the reaction or rearrangement of these atoms. That our brain gives orders to our body is indeed rearrangement of these atoms in our brain. Besides, our body is even from the enviroment considering that our body has larger volume which means more atoms when we get older. These examples illustrate that to some extent, a human is just a system composed of atoms which can react to the forces outside.
To sum up, I mostly agree with this statement from the standpoint of social science and fully support it if I consider it from the physical standpoint.
- Some people believe that college students should consider their own talents and interests when choosing a field of a study. Others believe that base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. 66
- Governments shuold offer a free university education to any students who have been admitted to a university but who cannot offer the tuition 66
- Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. 66
- Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. 83
- Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their national state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain. 70
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, second, so, still, for instance, kind of, no doubt, in other words, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 33.0505617978 203% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2549.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 531.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80037664783 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73535935472 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468926553672 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1210229758 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.863636364 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1363636364 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.40909090909 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0818039168939 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0306917528669 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697527743617 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0586207540083 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546394805199 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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