The reason why human’s behavior is colorful and interesting cannot be separated from the unique character and decision of each individual. While just as the point that arguer suppose, human’s behavior do control by external factors in some way, I still propose that inherent factors and external impacts are paramount to it.
Indeed, to a large extent, human’s behavior unavoidably receive the exhibition and influences from external factors. Since from the ancient time, people are gregarious animals. Different from other animals, the human does not have ironclad armor and thick fur, the relatively fragile body is hard to survive individually in the rough nature. Nevertheless, relying on group intelligence and strength make human occupied a stable and important position. For instance, in order to avoid the pursuit of a large carnivore, human make the attack tools like knife and spear together with the group. These collective actions have reversed the tragic fate of the individual being killed, and even made the unbreakable beast as human’s food. In this situation, we can conclude that amounts of human’s behavior depend on the group, which belong to a kind of external factors.
There are a lot of similar examples like I am a part-time teacher of children. When I choose to operate educational movies for my students, I will choose the series of suitable movies according to my own thinking, as well as searching the evaluation of those movies on the internet, to get the further reference. Of course, because I am a junior teacher, I have to referent the suggestions of my leaders and other teachers who have more experience in this position. Thus, those recommendations will make me perform different behaviors. For example, facing classes that they comprehend more than me, I should play disparate movies. Also, in response to the requirement of school, playing some English cartoon as instead, to help children enhance English level when they are educated. The above example is a normal thing, my behavior nevertheless receives the integral influence by both external and inherent factors. That also sufficiently support my opinion, external factors and inherent impact both are important in affect human’s behavior.
To sum up, most people never totally get rid of society, even a hermit who has lived in the mountains, has to communicate with mongers when he has to buy necessities. However, each people still are the individual with different ideas. Therefore, external factors and inherent thinking have an integral role in human behavior, paranoid that one side is more significant than the other part is not dialectical and sufficient enough.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: in effect
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, of course, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2278.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32242990654 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90057460552 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567757009346 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3227932333 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.9 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45 5.21951772744 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10914630425 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0343303669433 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030283139791 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664645233988 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161380653648 0.0667264976115 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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