SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live then Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp’s current headquarters. Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
“Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.”
As the author mentioned, there were three obvious disadvantages of Middlesburg, the homeowners' opinion, the urban area it was, and the high taxes. All of this seemingly reasonable so-called truth made the Supercorp made a decision that living in Corporateville is better than Middlesburg. However, the Supercop's decision largely based on the unwarranted assumptions which need to be proved by extra information.
First of all, as the Supercorp say, the recent surge in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live rather than Middlesburg. However, we do not have the specific information such as the data of the person who make this kind of choice to support this assumption. In hence, we cannot make the so-called assumption of it. For example, it will be not convincing as it stands due to the definition of recent, what if the people who gonna live in Corporateville is not the same group as the group who live in Middleburg? Then the Supercorp should reconsider this problem and make a more convincing assumption.
Second, according to an employee survey, Supercorp has concluded that its workers do not have lots of interests in living in the urban area. Nevertheless, this assumption based on an obscure survey, we need to prove that how many employees who take the survey will live in the Corporateville. Moreover, we need to find out the consistency of the employees, how many workers are in this employees group, and what kind of place will the other employees like engineers prefer. If there will be only small group employees who are workers live in the new place--- Corporateville, then the Supercop's assumption will be reconsidered.
Last, the Supercorp mentioned that Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg. Therefore, they made the assumption based on an unwarranted information such as their life experiences. Nevertheless, there are lots of impactions will influent the safety and the life cost in a different place. The lower taxes may be seemingly cheaper than the higher one, but we need to combine the goods own price and make the final evaluation. Moreover, the safety is not only based on the taxes. If the goods in Middlesburg is totally cheaper then Corporateville, and the police officers and the government policies in Middlesburg are more strict, then the Supercop's assumption will be weakened, otherwise, it will be strengthened.
To sum up, the Supercop's assumption needs to prove by more extra information, and we cannot agree with this one since there is too much flaw we need to fix.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2080 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.964 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.997 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 73 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.783 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.842 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'homeowners'' or 'homeowner's'?
Suggestion: homeowners'; homeowner's
...vious disadvantages of Middlesburg, the homeowners opinion, the urban area it was, and the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...here will be only small group employees who are workers live in the new place--- Corpor...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 524, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cheaper than'?
Suggestion: cheaper than
... If the goods in Middlesburg is totally cheaper then Corporateville, and the police officers...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 532, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...goods in Middlesburg is totally cheaper then Corporateville, and the police officers...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, then, therefore, for example, kind of, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09785202864 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11222125384 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448687350835 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1092825703 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.421052632 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.70786347227 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245369158969 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851801516758 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10320143206 0.0701772020484 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13359261368 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082411840981 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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