The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The word `technology` is root for to make life easier and faster. In fact, in today's century most of work are done by automate machine with greater efficacy. The prompt suggested that we should use for technology for our mundane tasks so we could have more time for our hobby. In my opinion, I will strongly agree with this suggestion and argue people to use more technology efficiently for three reasons.
To begin, the job market hires machine and software to do mundane tasks. Thus, people have time for other activities. For instance, in the 1950 to 1970 the job revolves around same mundane tasks like maintaining documents etc. With the technology advances in upcoming year we very efficiently stores our document or maintain or track our document. Before this, we have to do every task by ourselves like maintaining or stores important documents. Hence do to this, people found more time to spend with other activities. The above examples illustrates how technological advancement helps people to relax and do other activities.
Further, even we assume the technology didn't increase people efficiency or make them lethargic. For instance. today most of work in daily job is done on the computer like data-entry, making software, calculate daily finance etc. Due to this, daily tasks become simple and faster and there don't spend more time to do this mundane works. But to develop this all technology or software, we need people who can made this advancement in their respective field so other people can use this software. Thus, advancement in software/technology make us more efficient.
Of course, someone will argue that due to technology advancement, people's willingness to work is decrease and just use technology for every single task. But in my counter opinion, if the people use technology for increase their lifestyle so that they can focus on more on their personal interest than spending time on mundane tasks. So do to technology advancement we can work faster and more efficiently and we have spare time to work on other tasks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, thus, for instance, in fact, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 340.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08529411765 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9065535662 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476470588235 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0069401557 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8947368421 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84210526316 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231098923028 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854731710225 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548507596548 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167464280631 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372346328164 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.