The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Nowadays, people are enjoying the fruits of technology advancement and still expect more to come. In fact, no one had thought the big steps technology has taken making people’s life more efficient. The prompt recommends that our lives will become easier and we will be able to get more leisure time due to the progress in technology. In my opinion, I agree with this suggestion and argue that people should own technology and not vice versa for a few reasons.
Firstly, it is true that technology innovations are a common thing at these times. Thus, people are using these in their favor. For example, cellular telephones are a very useful tool that has made our lives easy. Consequently, communication through them has pushed globalization to a higher point which no one had thought before. However, too much time on our devices is not a good thing because it makes people depend on those phones and devote most of their free time to them. The above example illustrates that technology is good until it does not touch the interests of people, which is time and energy consuming.
Secondly, technology is not only phones but everything that is making our lives easy and shortens our work hours. For instance, at home we use different machines to clean, cook or to entertain us. Not worrying about cleaning or cooking gives us a considerable amount of time we can use for other things. Research has proven that people are freer now from previous extra chores they had to do before. In other words, smart machines are doing what many people had to do in a factory for example and can work less hours than before. One needs to look how much free time people have now compared with before.
In conclusion, technology innovations are present in our life and we should use them efficiently so we get more leisure time. Even though people tend to spend more time on their devices, this brings them together and makes globalization a concrete fact. Technological advancement was something unexpected but has improved our life with gigantic step. We should keep using the advancements in our favor.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...o in a factory for example and can work less hours than before. One needs to look how much...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...o in a factory for example and can work less hours than before. One needs to look ho...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84122562674 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62048454862 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545961002786 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5253973632 60.3974514979 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.9 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.95 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05 5.21951772744 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226247912799 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701439605305 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395856333252 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146205995547 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418668180464 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.