The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t

One must admit, technological advancement have definitely contributed to make people's life better than before, but I do not agree that it has really contributed to increased efficiency and hence more leisure time.

To begin with, leisure time revitalises, gives a break from monotony and hence recharges a person. Although, technological advancement have opened new never imagined ways of engaging during the leisure time however facts and statistics are proving that they are significant factors in lowering productivity during work hours and overall contributing to lesser efficiency of people. Today, most of people are spending approximately 3-4 hours on social apps, playing games on mobiles or just scrolling through updates of people which are potentially not contributing to individual's efficiency. Later, they work late in offices and hence reducing their leisure time.

Admittedly, today technology have made it easy to share and connect and supporters of the other side of camp would definitely argue on its an individual choices and decisions on how much technology he is allowing to distract or how much people indulge in the unnecessary meaningless content available. However, they fail to acknowledge the fact that if people have been choosing correctly, there should be decrease in the reported stress-levels, depression, number of suicide attempts, lack of socialization, which is not the case. Statistics says, that with ease of life and robots working for you, 33% of world population is obese and suffering from mental/physical illness.

It would not be wrong to say - leisure time have become a rare commodity in today's era. Today, it is hard to see people actually taking time-off for their souls. We all have been using "sorry, I was busy" phase more than before generations have been because we are not able to realise the subtle difference between a quality leisure time which really nurtures one's hobbies or passions.

Truth lies somewhere in middle, and one cannot deny technological advancements have definitely increased efficiency of those who have prudently made their choices, however average minds and majority of people have failed to put technology for increasing efficiency and hence engaging more in the activities which can really fuel their souls during the leisure time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... to lesser efficiency of people. Today, most of people are spending approximately 3-4 hours on...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'distracting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: distracting
...s on how much technology he is allowing to distract or how much people indulge in the unnec...
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Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ology he is allowing to distract or how much people indulge in the unnecessary meani...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'decreased'?
Suggestion: decreased
...een choosing correctly, there should be decrease in the reported stress-levels, depressi...
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Line 7, column 371, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...lity leisure time which really nurtures ones hobbies or passions. Truth lies som...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'so', 'to begin with']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25495049505 0.240241500013 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.188118811881 0.157235817809 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0742574257426 0.0880659088768 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0767326732673 0.0497285424764 154% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0445544554455 0.0444667217837 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111386138614 0.12292977631 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0767326732673 0.0406280797675 189% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.96247146872 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.029702970297 0.030933414821 96% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.039603960396 0.0997080785238 40% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0148514851485 0.0249443105267 60% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0173267326733 0.0148568991511 117% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2332.0 2732.02544248 85% => OK
No of words: 363.0 452.878318584 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.42424242424 6.0361032391 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.58838876751 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396694214876 0.366273622748 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.31129476584 0.280924506359 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.217630853994 0.200843997647 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.165289256198 0.132149295362 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96247146872 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 219.290929204 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589531680441 0.48968727796 120% => OK
Word variations: 68.6548856022 55.4138127331 124% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6194690265 58% => OK
Sentence length: 30.25 23.380412469 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.5430679182 59.4972553346 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 194.333333333 141.124799967 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.25 23.380412469 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.674092028746 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 61.379476584 51.4728631049 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.432 1.64882698954 87% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460006824357 0.391690518653 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.083302185993 0.123202303941 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0628316888288 0.077325440228 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.621050265341 0.547984918172 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.208874678314 0.149214159877 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179890569769 0.161403998019 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655729337021 0.0892212321368 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.219992237273 0.385218514788 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0524115770746 0.0692045440612 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271551031145 0.275328986314 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500169191186 0.0653680567796 77% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.4325221239 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.5995575221 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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