In today's society people are continually benefiting from technology. It has been incorporated in evry aspect of our daily lives with the goals of turning our lives more efficient. Starting from the coffee maker that allows us to start our day with freshness and focus to the extreme example of space rockets that are sent to space to study the outer world. But with the ssumption that the statement has made, a question arises. Do we use technology wisely? Do we use it for the purpose it was intended for which is to make our lives easier, more productive and efficient? Or we have taken it to a devastating level to the extent that we no longer know how to use our leisure time properly which necessarily makes the assumption accuaret?
In my opinion, technology has made or life better and no one can deny this fact. But for the issue of leisure time, I believe it depends on the person personality, daily choices and circumstances. Every one will use the time they saved through the utilization of technology in their own way; according to their aims and pursuits in life. For example, a worker would invest his weekend to stay with his family and children. He prefers to spend weekednds doing outdoors activities, cooking for his family or visiting his relatives. He prefers to connect personally with people. On the other hand consider another worker who would choose to spend the weekend on accomplishing extra work because this way he can get more money that will allow him to buy his dream car. As you can see, even with free time in fact it is all about priorities. So it is not correct to put the blame on technology for not spending our free times in a relaxing and convenient ways. It is the resbonsibility of each individual to use technology wisely so they can benefit from it.
Another example, assume a guy who has just recently finished his final exams got bored. He would definitely be lying in bed for hours watching movies or series on YouTube or he might text a friend through facebook. They would keep sending emojies and smiley faces while interacting. He probably thinks that by staying in his room for several hours with his mobile sticking in his hands and isolated from people, that he is relaxing and enjoying his time but in fact he is not. I think this will bring him more boredom and laziness. But what if this guy changed his mind and decided to meet his friend in person. This would allow for ideas and interest exchange. They would walk in the neighborhood and smell fresh air. All this will be beneficial for their mental and physical health.
In the end, I think that technology has succeeded in making our lives efficient. It indeed has saved us a huge amount of time. Providing the previous evidence, the connection between technology and our decreased free time is not accurate as long as we are using it wisely to get its benefits.
No one can deny the positive impacts of technology on our daily lives. It has been incorporated in every part of our day, starting from the coffee maker that allow us start our day with freshness and focus to the space rockets that are sent to study the space. The goal of technology was to make our life easier, more productive, and more efficient. That was the intended goal but do we really use technology for this purpose? Are we using it to wisely?
The answer is no! Our utilization of technology has taken a devastating direction. In fact, incorporation of technology into our everyday lives has caused us to be more dependent, conformist and lazy. Surely, technology has made enormous changes in every part of our life. And to your surprise, even the leisure time culture was affected too. Nowadays, if a young man feels bored he would probably stay bed for several hours watching series or movies on YouTube to entertain himself. Or he would talk to a friend through Facebook by sending emojies and smiley faces while interacting. And in my opinion, this willbring him more boredom, he thinks he is relaxing and taking a break and it actually lead to isolation. But Imagine now if this guy decided to meet his friend in person for example. By interacting with a real person, chatting with them, he will enjoy his time more. This allows exchange of ideas and interests, which can make their time more enjoyable. They could even go for a walk and smell fresh air which will benefit their mental and physical health for sure.
In the past, before the massive and widespread of mobile phones and gadgets, school age children used to go outside to spend their free time. They would do sports, go on picnics, play together but unfortunately now they would individually stick to their ipad or tablet the whole day. Apparently, the assumption of the statement is accurate. Our unwise use of technology has changed even our ways of having fun and spending our free time in a bad way.
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 54
- Instead of making more leisure time available, instant foods, instant communication, faster transportation have contributed to a more rushed and frantic pace than ever before. 16
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 58
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 50
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be 16
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, apparently, but, if, really, so, while, as to, for example, i think, in fact, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 45.0 14.8657303371 303% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 118.0 33.0505617978 357% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 107.0 58.6224719101 183% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4062.0 2235.4752809 182% => OK
No of words: 860.0 442.535393258 194% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72325581395 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.41532608411 4.55969084622 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55581712762 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 358.0 215.323595506 166% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416279069767 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1276.2 704.065955056 181% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 6.24550561798 384% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 49.0 20.2370786517 242% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5559417317 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8979591837 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5510204082 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44897959184 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 30.0 10.2758426966 292% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198405242064 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500073659754 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353934155917 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106500912298 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422645399878 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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