Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
Schools should focus not only on the academics, but also on several others aspects. This make the student prepared for future. As the developements are happening at a very high rate, the prerequisites to enter a certain field increases. In a less time a normal person cannot fulfil the prerequisites. For common aspects, life is too short to make mistakes and learn from them. It would be a good practice if one is told about the common mistakes of the students so that they can avoid it.
For example in the field of Badminton , P.V. Sindhu from India is a very good player who has won a silver medal in recent Olympics. Pullela Gopichand , the trainer of P.V Sindhu has taught all the mistakes he has done during his gameplay and has managed to make P.V. Sindhu excel in her career quicker. This also made her stronger. If the situation was, making mistakes and then learning from it, then it would make the task slower. Despite of teaching everything, new problems arise and it then becomes the responsibility of the individual to tackle. Similarly Schools should give their 100 percent in training students for all aspects in life. This kind of training gives students edge over others in all situations and leads to good overall development.
In contrast if a schools provides solution for every problem the student faces in his childhood, it reduces the student's problem solving capability. Rather than giving solutions directly, schools should do more work on framing the academic pattern which has a proper blend of both the academic and non-academic aspects of life.
Excelling solely in academics is of no use to an individual. Consider the example of life of APJ Abdul Kalam and Osama Bin Laden. Even though both studied the same rocket science, the lack of proper way of teaching resulted in diverse adulthood. Examples like these show that there is a need of improvement in teaching the non-academic aspects of adulthood.If an individual is taught how to handle the adulthood problems, it would make the individual's life easier and results in a well developed society. In contrast if schools dont teach properly on how to handle adulthood situations, it may lead to depression , suicides, etc. Perfect balance between academic and non-academic aspects of life is very much important and schools should do more for the desired result.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, similarly, so, then, well, for example, in contrast, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 395.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94936708861 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71101219688 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559493670886 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3769914727 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0952380952 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80952380952 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409449865239 0.243740707755 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100346614959 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125917542159 0.0758088955206 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244062637451 0.150359130593 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120793038546 0.0667264976115 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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