Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Investing money into something that one is unsure about is not a trivial task. The prompt states that some people hope that government funding is important for the arts to engender; on the other hand, opponents believe that funding would rather tar the integrity of the arts. However, I agree that government funding will flourish the arts as funding would make it widely available to people and the arts would grow along with the people.
Firstly, the art is not something to hide or keep away from people. It is something ubiquitous which should be among the people rather than a specific group of people. For instance, Cricket is a sport that was played in England since a very long time, but as soon as the British started investing money into the sport, it had spread over half of Europe and Asia. Now, Cricket is one of the most known sports in the world; every year more than five hundred million is invested in the sport. The financial support is one of the major reasons for the sport to grow; similarly, if the arts like stand up comedy, music, and painting are encouraged by the government, then more people will indulge themselves into the art form and more talent will come out to showcase the art. Nevertheless, the opponents can argue that when more people indulge in the art form, the base and roots of the art form is lost. For example, earlier there was only one type of guitar and now there are lots of guitar like an electric guitar, etc. So, a lot of people had started making their own music; the original songs were lost somewhere in the past, but isn’t the art meant for the people and by the people. Thus, people should have the complete right mould it according to contemporary thought.
Secondly, the art is crucial to the development of the youth in the nation. If young minds haven’t seen or done anything apart from reading a textbook, then soon the nation will have only prosaic minds, who know nothing, but how to gain textbook knowledge. The youth should be familiar with the world outside the textbook. They should experience different games and point of views; this would help the children to increase their scope. For example, stand up comedy is a wonderful art form; in which the artist interacts with the audiences and makes jokes. This helps the artist to know about more points of views and about more cultures. Therefore, the more knowledge people have, the better they can do enhance the art form. Moreover, the better artist gets, the more number people support the artist which indirectly supports the art. Additionally, the art form also helps the people to forget their daily stressful routine. The more people know about the art and its benefit, the more number people will join it. For example, in the mid-eighteen century, when painting became popular, more number of people started painting after their daily work than before. People would especially take out one hour from their busy routine to mitigate their minds. This activity became so widespread that some people opted to become professional painter; which led to the growth of the art and the artist.
In sum, government funding will not only flourish the art form but also give rise to new art forms and styles.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 770, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'number' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: number
.... Moreover, the better artist gets, the more number people support the artist which indirec...
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Line 9, column 989, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'number' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: number
...know about the art and its benefit, the more number people will join it. For example, in th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, thus, apart from, for example, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2684.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 562.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77580071174 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30931241899 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485765124555 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 808.2 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 16.0 4.99550561798 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4202483477 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.230769231 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6153846154 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33098680166 0.243740707755 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983021881928 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102465545029 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256476480273 0.150359130593 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108336108672 0.0667264976115 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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