Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented above.
A person's values and beliefs are the sum of the environment in which they grow up. This environment consists of a myriad of factors, including but not limited to parents, peers, movies and television shows. Although each of these factors contribute in developing a child's value system, I believe that parents and peers influence a child more than any other factor.
Parents are a child's first teachers. They instill moral values in the child and give them a sense of what is wrong and right. Children try to imitate what they observe around them, and during developing years, they spend a significant amount of time in their home observing their parents. For instance, there have been many cases where children of abusive parents grew up to be violent adults. This is because they learn that force is the way to solve every problem in life, at least this is what they observe every day in their parents' behaviour. On the other hand, children of those parents who manifest propriety and moral well-being have much better chance of growing up to be responsible adults.
Outside the home, children spend most time with a selected group of friends. Needless to say, the impact of their peers would be significant as well. It is often said that a person is the average of five people he or she spends the most time with. There are a few bad apples in almost every school. Children who find themselves in a bad company may get carried away, despite their parents not showing any violence. An innocent child in a bad company would try to do unacceptable activities, just to get a sense of acceptance in his or her peer group. This peer pressure eventually change their routine behaviour, and makes them do things they would have been reluctant to do in the beginning.
I concede that violence in movies has became prominent these days. It certainly has some influence on a person. However, responsible parents would teach their children that movies and television shows are different from reality and dessuade them from imitating what they see in movies. Such children would become nearly immune to the effects of violent movies. While they might still enjoy watching action movies as a source of entertainment, they are unlikely to imitate it in their real life.
In sum, it is true that a wide variety of factors influence children's behavior. However, parents and children have a more prominent impact than other factors, considering children spend most of their time in their company.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 39, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
... I concede that violence in movies has became prominent these days. It certainly has ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, still, well, while, at least, for instance, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2077.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89858490566 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5143047052 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514150943396 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2572540399 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3043478261 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4347826087 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171649267658 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521982101908 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431379543802 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106129109033 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322633133729 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.