“Students should fund their education with part-time work that they do while they study.”
The norm among the youth these days is to be independent, following which students tend to believe that funding their education with part-time jobs while studying is the best-suited decision. The belief sounds very intuitive, however part-time jobs demand additional exertion which may prove as a hindrance in providing deserved attention to education alongside. It is for this reason, I believe that students should rely on other sources for their funding and focus on education primely over part-time jobs to attain long term achievements.
The currently developing world demands immense knowledgeable outcomes from the upcoming students as they are expected to explore the field with innovation and distinct approaches to make notable contributions. Pertaining to which the curriculum of the courses for students has been structured in such a way that it requires the students to approach the courses with zest, innovation, dedication, and consistency. Assuming that the student has a well paid part-time job, it will turn out to be a hurdle for the students and not permit them to invest their time and energy into the education, while it, in turn, demands more of the students. However, some students are capable of coping up with both part-time jobs and education simultaneously but I would argue that such compelling efforts from the students would affect their effectiveness and productivity. For instance, a medical student is dependent on the part-time job of a night shift receptionist at a hospital which although does not demand energy in terms of knowledge, it drains the student of his or her physical self which might affect the student in his or her coming classes the next morning and also if the student was able to utilize a part of the time invested in the part-time job on improving on his or her courses, it would have contributed to his or her productivity in terms of education. Therefore, students should be encouraged to invest all the time and effort into their education rather than on part-time jobs, to gain expertise in their respective courses which are highly demanded by the world and will turn into a massive boom in the latter days.
When students choose to fund their education through part-time jobs, the jobs need to be extensive enough to pay you enough money for your education. Since the students lack expertise in the field and have just begun to learn, finding a job that would yield then enough money for their education is battle. Students do believe that achieving a well paid part-time job is a piece of cake, but as known most of the part-time jobs awarded to the students are the ones demanding manual labor such as at book stores, cafes, and supermarkets which surely will not earn the student enough money for his or her tuition. For example, if a computer science major undergraduate which costs about 15000 dollars is doing a part-time job at a book store, although he is ready to put in additional efforts it will hardly earn him about 200-500 dollars which would barely even cover his daily expenses. Part-time jobs for students are for earning a few dollars for their daily expenses and hence is not a reliable source for the funding of their education.
In conclusion, I disagree with the idea of students funding their education with part-time jobs while studying. Students are expected to focus majorly on their education and put in their precious time and effort into it to expect more profitable returns in the future. Also, it is a known fact about the kinds of part-time jobs an inexperienced student can get and the returns are not well suited for funding the student's education. Overall, it is proved the best for the students not to rely on part-time jobs while studying for the funding of their education.
In conclusion, I disagree with the idea of students funding their education with part-time jobs while studying. Students are expected to focus majorly on their education and put in their precious time and effort into it to expect more profitable returns in the future. Also, it is a known fact about the kinds of part-time jobs an inexperienced student can get and the returns are not well suited for funding the student's education. Overall, it is proved the best for the students not to rely on part-time jobs while studying for the funding of their education.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 413, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...rns are not well suited for funding the students education. Overall, it is proved the be...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 414, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...rns are not well suited for funding the students education. Overall, it is proved the be...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 100.0 58.6224719101 171% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3617.0 2235.4752809 162% => OK
No of words: 731.0 442.535393258 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94801641587 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.19971265256 4.55969084622 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70488764622 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.374829001368 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1111.5 704.065955056 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.5164654425 60.3974514979 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.409090909 118.986275619 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2272727273 23.4991977007 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436323858348 0.243740707755 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.189746058511 0.0831039109588 228% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899390818891 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.320906439793 0.150359130593 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629357402357 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.1392134831 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.8420337079 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 413, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...rns are not well suited for funding the students education. Overall, it is proved the be...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 414, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...rns are not well suited for funding the students education. Overall, it is proved the be...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 100.0 58.6224719101 171% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3617.0 2235.4752809 162% => OK
No of words: 731.0 442.535393258 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94801641587 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.19971265256 4.55969084622 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70488764622 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.374829001368 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1111.5 704.065955056 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.5164654425 60.3974514979 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.409090909 118.986275619 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2272727273 23.4991977007 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436323858348 0.243740707755 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.189746058511 0.0831039109588 228% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899390818891 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.320906439793 0.150359130593 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629357402357 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.1392134831 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.8420337079 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.