The bar chart illustrates the 4 kind of digital games ( mobile phone games, online games, console games, handheld games) which were sold over 6 years from 2000 to 2006 in the world. Units are measured in billion dollars.
Overall, handheld games were the most popular video games, which were the second most popular video games between 2000 and 2004, lost their place in 2005,2006.People around the world spent more money for online games and mobile phone games year after year.
In terms of handheld games, people spent under $12 billion on this in 2000.This figure rose slightly to next 6 years and the final years ,it was under $18 billion .Console games which sold for under $6 billion in the began XX th century,reduced steadly to next years.In 2006 there were the least popular digital games which was almost $3 billion.
On the other hand, mobile phone games and online games did not sale in 2000 but inline games sold in the next years(around $1 billion) and in 2002 they both was sold (almost $1 billion) and in the last year the amount of money were about $6 billion, $9 billion respectively.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'second', 'so', 'kind of', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238095238095 0.268076937826 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.109523809524 0.116061578633 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.114285714286 0.0759168565197 151% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0380952380952 0.0366838410393 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0142857142857 0.0131127313244 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128571428571 0.155750635184 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0190476190476 0.0379272487307 50% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.3097642758 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0142857142857 0.0210936926555 68% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0714285714286 0.0948980150116 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.00437022459523 0% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0190476190476 0.00967000014798 197% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1096.0 1161.00487805 94% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.9 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.86096256684 5.90752243213 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73763899035 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.283422459893 0.337110787985 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.176470588235 0.247514529752 71% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.101604278075 0.171178102325 59% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0320855614973 0.112407865282 29% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.3097642758 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.546246751206 97% => OK
Word variations: 45.5922477588 49.3433353143 92% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 8.93414634146 56% => OK
Sentence length: 37.4 23.0094962315 163% => OK
Sentence length SD: 102.222502415 42.9750493124 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 219.2 135.714022679 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.4 23.0094962315 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.689975730869 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 1.48048780488 1689% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 55.0470588235 47.7609492067 115% => OK
Elegance: 2.38235294118 2.94281807926 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369771909416 0.418131533498 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.19994121707 0.181151798455 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.193230642522 0.0850326197045 227% => Ideas in sentences are similar.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.836253559301 0.706616315825 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.28815379408 0.157042692854 183% => Sentences are changing often in a paragraphs.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.237998013081 0.228904883108 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906774831161 0.108899403657 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.427617477979 0.367819155151 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0948732102227 0.0812612215331 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279436843232 0.316326947829 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059968218754 0.0921553760075 65% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70731707317 54% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.14146341463 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.08536585366 49% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 3.16585365854 63% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 0.956097560976 105% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.02926829268 66% => OK
Total topic words: 5.0 7.1512195122 70% => OK
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 5.5 Out of 9