The chart illustrates the change of the telephone calls, divided by three categories, in the UK from 1995 and 2002. Units are measured in billions of minutes.
It can be seen that Local-fixed line calls of the UK was the highest in the given period. Starting from approximately 70b minutes in 1995, Local-fixed line calls increased steadily, reaching just under 90b minutes in 1999. After peaking 90b minutes in 1999, local calls fell back to 70b minutes at the end of the year.
In term of National and International-fixed line calls, it grew gradually from about 38b minutes to 60b minutes from 1995 to 2002. Between 2001 and 2002, there was only a mere increase with 1b minutes from 60b to 61b minutes.
With regard to Mobiles, it was the least calls in UK with less than 5b minutes in 1995. Moreover, there was a significant increase in mobiles from approximately 2b minutes to 45b minutes from the beginning of the year to 2002. From 2000 to 2001, there was a double increase with about 20b to 40b minutes.
Overall, the trend of National and International and Mobiles had a huge increase throughout this given period. Although the local fixed line calls decreased, it still the most popular telephone calls in the UK.
Hi, I already added new
Hi, I already added new sentence. Could you please check and rate again? thank you :)
Need to develop a variety of
Need to develop a variety of sentences. Look:
there was only a mere increase with 1b minutes from 60b to 61b minutes.
it was the least calls in UK with less than 5b minutes in 1995. Moreover,
there was a significant increase in mobiles from approximately 2b minutes to 45b minutes from the beginning of the year to 2002. From 2000 to 2001,
there was a double increase with about 20b to 40b minutes.
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there was a double with about 20b to 40b minutes.
there was a double increase from 20b to 40b minutes.
flaws:
Still need more details. for example, for Local-fixed line:
this type of call witnessed a gradual decrease from the year 1999 until the end of the period in question, 2002 //you don't have
read a sample:
http://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-i-essays/chart-below-shows-to…
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by categories which are Local-fixed line, National and International-fixed line and Mobiles,
better:
by three categories , //don't need list all of them
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 202 200
No. of Characters: 962 1000
No. of Different Words: 98 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.77 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.762 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.898 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 56 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 51 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.227 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.458 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.71 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4