The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following two diagrams provide a breakdown in percentages of UK students' self-perception with regards to their capacity of financial organization. Overall, it is clear that over half per cent of British students believe they are virtually well organised.
According to the pie chart, the vast majority (55%) velieve in their skills to organise themselves financially. In contrast, only 4% of UK students have issues to manage their incentives.
Yet, it is worth mentioning the clear patter that is established between students whose monetary management seem not to be very efficient and the ones who consider it to be very efficient. These two groups form approximately a fifth of the tota, 21% and 20% respectivetly.
Moreover, it can be een from the table that this 21% of very organised students are aged from 22 to over 26 years old, the oldest ones forming over a third of the group (that is 35%). The 22 and 23-25 years olds form 18% and 26% respectivetly.
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Sentence: Overall, it is clear that over half per cent of British students believe they are virtually well organised.
Error: organised Suggestion: organized
Sentence: According to the pie chart, the vast majority 55 velieve in their skills to organise themselves financially.
Error: velieve Suggestion: believe
Error: organise Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: These two groups form approximately a fifth of the tota, 21 and 20 respectivetly.
Error: respectivetly Suggestion: respectively
Error: tota Suggestion: total
Sentence: Moreover, it can be een from the table that this 21 of very organised students are aged from 22 to over 26 years old, the oldest ones forming over a third of the group that is 35.
Error: een Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: organised Suggestion: organized
Sentence: The 22 and 23-25 years olds form 18 and 26 respectivetly.
Error: respectivetly Suggestion: respectively
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 163 200
No. of Characters: 774 1000
No. of Different Words: 102 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.573 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.748 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.925 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 48 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 42 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.746 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.702 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4