The line graph illustrates the percentage of the ageing people aged 65 and over in three different countries, japan, sweden, usa over 100 year from 1940 to 2040 and is measured in percentage.
Overall, it can be seen that, the percentage of ageing people aged 65 and over rose in three different countries, despite some fluctuations over the period.
In 1940, the percentage of people aged 65 and over in USA stood at under 10% qnd there was a significant increase to 15% in 1980 for this figure. Next, from 1980 to 2020 the percentage of ageing people aged 65 and over remained stable at approximately 14%. Then, this figure will rise suddenly until the end of 2040 projection. However, there was a fluctuations in the proportion of ageing people aged 65 and over in Sweden from 1940 to 2010 to 20%. Then, this figure will increase dramatically to 25% over the following 20 years.
However, the proportion of ageing people in japan which was aged 65 and over stood at 5% in 1940, this figure had the most lowest percentage compared to two countries America and Sweden. Next, between 1960 and 2000 this figure witnessed a stable at 5%, same level at which it started. Then, this figure will grow significantly to just below 30% in 2040 prediction, this figure reached the highest percentage than two others country at the end of prediction 2040.
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Sentence: However, the proportion of ageing people in japan which was aged 65 and over stood at 5 in 1940, this figure had the most lowest percentage compared to two countries America and Sweden.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, proper
Suggestion: Refer to countries and America
Sentence: Then, this figure will grow significantly to just below 30 in 2040 prediction, this figure reached the highest percentage than two others country at the end of prediction 2040.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to others and country
Sentence: In 1940, the percentage of people aged 65 and over in USA stood at under 10 qnd there was a significant increase to 15 in 1980 for this figure.
Error: qnd Suggestion: ?
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Be sensitive to use 'however'
Don't repeat words like 'this figure'
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