The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the consumption of alcoholin liters selected countries, for the period 1960-2000. Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key features, and make any relevant comparisons.
The curve lines illustrate the statistics of smokers in population and the intake of alcohol in litres. It was chosen in there countries during four decades that started from 1960 to 2000.
According to the graph, the graph reported that USA was the highest of proportion smokers among those three countries in 1970. While, Holland reached the hill of alcohol consumption among the countries in the second curve that increased significantly in 1980.
In the first chart showed in 1980 the proportion of smokers declined steadily then levelled off until 2000. While,Holland in 1980 the rank of smokers decreased steadily during two decades. Japan fell slightly throughout four decades but the general trend was downwards.
In the second one, the chart line reported that in 1980 Holland gained the hill dramatically the number of alcohol consumer then levelled off until 2000. Turkey remained stable during two decades but rose slightly in 1980 then fall slightly again in 1990 to 2000. While, USA inclined steadily during two decades and obtain the peak in 1980 then decline steadily until 2000.
Interestingly, when USA is population of smoke decrease in 1980 then it was downwards during two decades. While, Turkey's alcohol consumer during four decades was fluctuated. It showed that the number of alcohol consumer in Turkey was lower than USA and Holland.
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USA the highest of proportion smokers among those three countries in 1970.
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While, Holland reached the hill of alcohol consumption among the countries in the second curve increased significantly in 1980.
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the proportion of smokers decline steadily
the proportion of smokers declined steadily
when USA's population of smoke decrease in 1980
when USA's population of smoke decreased in 1980
Sentence: Japan fell slightly throughout four decades but the general trendwas downwards.
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Sentence: In the second one, the chart line reported that in 1980 Holland gained the hill dramatically the numberof alcohol consumer then levelled offuntil 2000.
Error: numberof Suggestion: number
Error: offuntil Suggestion: until
Sentence: While, USA incline steadily during two decades andobtain the peak in 1980 then decline steadily until 2000.
Error: andobtain Suggestion: an obtain
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